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Donaut
11-30-2007, 09:37 PM
Your beauty intoxicates all you encounter,
Yet you fail to notice,
This is your blunder,

You've had a rough time,
Though now it is over,
But yet you continue clinging to what is left over,

And in doing this your depression grows deeper,
Pulling you apart at the seams,
Causing you to unravel and fall to you knees,
Pondering desperately: "How much worse can it be? "

To ease your mind of your terrible burden,
You bargain with Satan (as if he cares),
Giving you a release, in turn for your soul:
That you believe tarnished and not worth much at all,

When all of your friends have been with you till now,
But here comes the crossroads up ahead,
They give you a choice: "Stand tall or fall down."

You have your beauty and charm,
Your intelligence and grace,
Good friends and your health,
What more does it take for you?

Nymph of Destiny
11-30-2007, 11:12 PM
Another great poem...I love how you phrase the words and the verses...awesome job. :)

Donaut
11-30-2007, 11:16 PM
Another great poem...I love how you phrase the words and the verses...awesome job. :)

Thanks. I am really liking this feedback from my poems.

Nailpolish <3
11-30-2007, 11:17 PM
Amazing Poem =]

Your words are beautiful. The point is meaningful. dunno what else to say :3 its just really good xD

Peyton
11-30-2007, 11:21 PM
I like this one aswell.
But it doesn't have that much of a flow that the other two had.
But it's still pretty :3

Donaut
11-30-2007, 11:27 PM
I like this one aswell.
But it doesn't have that much of a flow that the other two had.
But it's still pretty :3

Yes, I realize this wasn't such a good one compared to the others, but I thought I had the right to post it. lol

Peyton
11-30-2007, 11:28 PM
Yes, I realize this wasn't such a good one compared to the others, but I thought I had the right to post it. lol

Lol, yeah you do have the right to :3
I was just saying it xD

Very Berry
11-30-2007, 11:29 PM
WOW Donaut that was wonderful I LUV IT!!! Amazing work