A Nobody not a Somebody - a poem

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Do you think this is a stupid poem?

  1. No way! I LOVE it! *snaps fingers*

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  2. I like it!

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  3. Eh, so-so...

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  4. No, I don't like it.

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  5. EWWW! I HATE IT!!! *throws rock at the poem*

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  1. Axel's#1fangirl Kingdom Keeper

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    Here's another poem I wrote. Ok, hopefully someone will take this seriously! (Some of my friends who read it thought it was funny that i wrote a kh2 poem)

    But here it is:

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    A Nobody not a Somebody

    This…is me.

    A broken being
    A heartless shell
    Is me.

    A shattered soul
    A tainted whole
    Is me.

    A Nobody….Is me.

    Deprived of Emotions
    Deprived of Memories
    Light and Dark?
    Deprived of choice.

    I long for the day
    When my heart shall be mine
    Free to grieve,
    And love
    And hate
    And when I will be labeled as a

    “Somebodyâ€

    But still,

    I’ll forever remain
    A broken being
    A heartless shell

    I’ll forever remain
    A shattered soul
    A tainted whole

    A Nobody not a Somebody.

    This…is me.
     
  2. FPS Steve Merlin's Housekeeper

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    Dude, that's a great poem. You should write a whole lot more.
     
  3. Axel's#1fangirl Kingdom Keeper

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    Thanks! :)
     
  4. Desmonic Kingdom Keeper

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    yeah, cool poem!
     
  5. Reoy Hollow Bastion Committee

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    damn your good i suck i'm nerves what will ppl think of my first fan-fic when i post it O_O i like that poem is really good and kinda sad
     
  6. Axel's#1fangirl Kingdom Keeper

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    Thanks! I was aiming for sad :)

    You should post your fanfic! I was SUPER nervous when i posted my Larxene's Crush story. I thought ppl would think it was stupid. But i was suprised to find people liked it!

    As long as you like it, it doesn't matter what others think. If you think it's good, then its probably the best story ever! :D
     
  7. Reoy Hollow Bastion Committee

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    yeah maybe your right thanks :D you know its weird when i make sad poem they suddenly turn happy xD i dunnno whats wrong with my writing
     
  8. Axel's#1fangirl Kingdom Keeper

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    Maybe thats just ur style of writing. Everyone has one!

    mine is that, when i come up with an idea for a story, i picture the characters in my head. Before i actually start to write, i see the story as like a movie in my head (i know it sounds stupid, but its really cool!) then, when i write, i just describe what i see. :)

    Just figure out your personal style, and go with it! Your stories will be awesome! :D
     
  9. LegoBricked Merlin's Housekeeper

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    oh, jeez. i'd be crying my but my bro would probably start staring...:(
    Dam, that was awesome. *aplausses* (if that's how you spell it)
     
  10. Axel's#1fangirl Kingdom Keeper

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    Thank you! :D
     
  11. Prince of Twilight Gummi Ship Junkie

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    This poem is really good!I like it :D
     
  12. Axel's#1fangirl Kingdom Keeper

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    Thanks! :D