Dark Hearts of KH-Vids

Keep it up!

 

Okay. *fillers*

 

can I be in it and die?

 

Umm, no sorry.

 

*cough*

Wasnt monday like two days ago? <>

 

I can't believe I only just saw this! *claps* its great so far! Please please continue with it :)​

 

Yeah. I'm having problems with chapter two of my story.

Okay. :)

 

Well, have it up soon >.<

 

Okay. I'll tell you when chapter two is out.

Edit: Chapter two is out now!!! :D

 

Very Cool ^^ I like the added chapter a lot *waiting now for the 3rd*

xD cool​

 

Thanks. :)

 

Not bad second chapter, I saw a few run-on sentances and some things could possibly be swithced around to make it run smoother, although over all not bad. You get the point across, but a little more detail could be used.

I can't wait to read the next one though, it's quite interesting so far.

 

Okay thanks. :)

 

XD

lol@ the Alice part
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Kewl story burnitup. :D

The scenes seem to go really fast, maybe try to slow them down or describe more. Something to make them a bit longer.

Keep up the good work~

 

Thanks 01_Kairi. :)

 

I cant freaking find chapter 2 <>

NM DONT LISTEN TO ME <>

It was good, but it seems like your really rushing everything. You need more detail, the surroundings, the enemies, just the details and that thought in general

 

^.^ Hahaha, its awesome :3
I cant wait for more!!!

 

It's at the first post.

Okay. :)

 

good work, but you could describe the ememy's unit and other stuff... i wanna be in it!! please....

 

I'll think about it, but if you do appear in it you're probably going to me a minor charcater(sp), becuase I have 23 main charcaters(sp) already.