Doesnt have a name but it was inspired by my username

Have u been a good boy??? Sounds like u haven't!!!​

 

Is there any significant meaning to this poem or just a spur of the moment....?

 

It was a spur of the moment and I have new poem up on my post soo.....updated <3

 

i love both of them!! XD epic fail on my part! :D

have you tried posting this on Poetry.com?

 

no but I will try Im not sure if its all that great to tell you truth

 

Heh, the second one is pretty interesting. It's more like a story then a poem, but still pretty good. Nice work. ^^

 

yeah it kinda is but I like my second one better

 

i really think you should, its absolutly grand... i submit all my poetry there,
and it's been published in a book!

http://www.poetry.com/dotnet/P8951940/999/1/display.aspx

I got an award for it!! AND now it's copyrighted. ^^

 

I like the new addition...it's kind of passive and nice.....it makes sense and i say....good job...:)

 

oh cool I might do that ^^

Thank you and it kinda was another spur-of-the-moment thing again :sweatdrop:

 

Totally loving the second poem now too, bud. Very nice.

 

second poem was cool man. nice work.

 

Thanks :)

Thank you :D

 

The poems are alright. Too depressing, though. Nobody wants to read depressing poetry, not unless it has a good story behind it. You might want to improve your flow too; you can tell me off but this thread has mostly just been suck ups :v

There is a hell of alot of spam in this thread >:

 

well I agree on the suck ups part because they wont tell me on how to improve it and also you are no help either because all your doing is bashing me

 

I was also telling you what you should change in future.

 

yes I know but can you also tell me some positive stuff too, I like that you told me on how to improve but It was only negitive stuff and I dont mind on that but I just wana know what is good also in the poem

 

You have to be open to all types of critique, not just the ones that feed your ego.

If you wish to discuss this further feel free to VM me.

 

I actually liked it to be honest.

I don't think that a poem has to be extensive in length to be good.

You do need to keep a check on your spelling and grammar but the idea is good.

Keep at it.


However, as you requested


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