Marluxia: I like to... Sora: You like to...what? Marluxia: I like to...MOVE IT MOVE IT! *breaks out in song and dance* Sora: 0_o XD Marluxia: Knock knock Sora: Who's there? Marluxia: NO ONE! *runs away laughing like an idiot* Sora: o_0 XD
AND I SAID SPRITE!!!!! It makes me uber hyper, and it makes me make my house collaspe cuz i'm bouncing off the wall :D
:D SPRITE!!!! :D
Thank you! I hope to have ch 6 out tonight :D
*dies a thousand times of laughter* THAT WAS HILARIOUS! XD PAGE PWN! :D
thank you! lol Roxas + Hyper = AHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!! XDXDXD oh, and when i put it in the one thread, its harder to know if i've updated :)
Really good! but can I make a small sugestion? When you type dialouge, start on a new line each time a new person talks. For example: Instead of this: Roxas luckily found his way back to the main part of the castle, where a green frizbee zoomed over his hair. "Sorry! You okay?" It was Axel and Demyx. "Yeah," "Did Saix pull your hair out?" Demyx asked, pulling locks of Roxas's hair up. "Nope! No chunky places." Try this: Roxas luckily found his way back to the main part of the castle, where a green frizbee zoomed over his hair. "Sorry! You okay?" It was Axel and Demyx. "Yeah," Roxas replied. "Did Saix pull your hair out?" Demyx asked, pulling locks of Roxas's hair up. Roxas smiled. "Nope! No chunky places." It looks a lot neater, and makes it easier to read :) But other than that, your story is very interesting, and I look forward to reading more :D
YAY! Chapter 5! :D Sry it took so long to come out, but I hope you like it! :D ~Chapter 5~ Xemnas was back in his room at the Castle. He nodded, looking over the last details on his clipboard. Everything was taken care of. He then turned out his light and went to sleep. +++ Xigbar had cleared out the basement, and turned it into a party room. He called for pizza, and had called some friends of his to bring the ‘drinks’. He smiled. The bachelor party was going to start soon. +++ Xaldin, after passing through his paper cut rage had finally finished the decorations. He folded each of them neatly and placed them into a box for safe keeping until the wedding tomorrow. After making sure everything was clean again, he went up into his room to get a good night’s sleep. +++ Vexen, having been taken over with boredom about two hours ago, was already asleep, and was planning to stay that way for the rest of the night. +++ Lexaeus was sitting in the living room, reading some Death Note manga. He had been invited to Cloud’s bachelor party, and was waiting until 9:00 p.m. He glanced up from his manga and onto a nearby clock. 8:58. “Two more minutes…†he mumbled before returning to his manga. +++ Zexion was in his room, still reading. He was growing tired, but he was at an exciting part of his book, and he wanted to keep reading. He yawned. “One more chapter.†+++ Saix was already asleep in his room +++ Axel was up in his room, working some more on his menu plans, and waiting for Cloud’s bachelor party to start. He was hoping soon, because he wanted to go to sleep. +++ Demyx circled the song he was going to play: ‘I Write Sins Not Tragedies’. He smiled. The song would fit the wedding PERFECTLY. Demyx yawned and turned out his light, and within seconds he was snoring away. +++ Luxord was in his room, laying in the dark, about to go to sleep. He had been invited to Cloud’s bachelor party, but after what had happened with Xigbar’s chips, he decided to not go, incase Xigbar was still sour about it. Luxord closed his eyes, and fell asleep instantly. +++ Marluxia had been asleep for an hour now. After setting up the roses in the Chapel, he decided to get some sleep. He’d add flowers to the reception room tomorrow morning. +++ Larxene had ‘volunteered’ to help with Anna’s make-up for the wedding tomorrow. She was in her room, asleep, a wicked smile on her face. She knew EXACTLY how she was going to do her make-up… +++ Roxas was still in the kitchen. By now he was slightly tired. He had just finished baking the 4th cake layer, and only had one more to go. Roxas was sitting at the kitchen table, bored, when Xigbar came into the room. “Hey! How’s it going?†he said cheerfully. Roxas looked over at him. “Just peachy.†He replied, a bit sour. He sighed. “I’m tired.†Xigbar thought for a moment, and then snapped his fingers. “I got just what you need!†he said, walking over to the refrigerator. He opened it and reached inside, pulling out what looked like a soda can. He handed it to Roxas, who inspected it. “Energy-O?†He said, raising an eyebrow. Xigbar nodded. “Yeah, it’s an energy drink. It’ll keep you awake.†He said. Roxas nodded. “Thanks.†“But hold on! Only drink ONE. Any more and…†Xigbar shuddered. “Let’s not think about that. Just drink that one and that one only, got it?†“Got it.†Roxas said. Xigbar smiled and walked off into the living room. Roxas looked at the can again. He then shrugged and opened the tab on the can. “Hope this stuff works…†he muttered to himself as he drank the liquid inside. As he drank, he instantly felt recharged. “Boy! This stuff is good!†he exclaimed, quickly drinking what was rest of it. He then threw away the can. Suddenly, he felt like he could stay up all night. But he still felt somewhat tired, and the cake was nowhere near done. Roxas walked over to the refrigerator, opened it, and peered inside. There, sitting on the back of the shelf, were five other cans of the energy drink Xigbar let him have. He puled out another one and opened the tab on the top. He smiled deviously. “One more won’t hurt…†he said, as he then gulped down the entire can…
This is getting interesting! :D I like the way you write. It's simple an consise, but you uderstand everything :) Keep it up! :D
lol :) thank you! the next chapter will come out tomorrow :) I'd finish it today, but i'm REALLY tired, and i kepp misspelling my words.
*dies laughin* AHAHAHA!!! THAT WAS REALLY FUNNY! :D great job! :D
Thank you! the next chapter will be out tonight :) And...uh....thats a good question!.....uhh.... they uhhhh.....stuff it down their...pants? *hopes everyone buys it* you'll haveta see :) and thank you! :D
XD hilarious! :D Math's ok. I love art and science :D
WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOT!!!! That was awesome!!! *claps* Great story! :D The last ch was HYSTERICAL! XD
Yeah, theres a reason for him to return! Cuz I want him too :D But still, i think he will come back. Call it a hunch.
XD 42!!!!! Of course!!!! Awesome job!
Uhhh...? Zexion! Do something! Zexion: Uhhh.....? *pokes Aku*
lol, thank you! :D
XD stinkin hilarious! I love it! :D
GGRRRR....MY NAME ISN'T ZSADE ON HERE!!!! It's Xed :) Call me that or I'll blow up ur car :K Oh, and i do make them read a lot of manga :)