lol yeah really! thanks! WOOTTTT!!!!! *starts playing 'we are the chamipons' song* That's awesome! Congrats! :D lol thanks! thats ok, i'm on the evil side alot too :) i wonder if he'll go through with it...
lol, who knows... thanks! the next chapter will be out later today (right now i got Saix my camera to work, and now i'm uploading the keyblade pics :D) i almost cried too! that is really hard to choose!!! yes, i made a mistake :D Thanks for pointing it out! *goes to edit* And thanks for reading! :D I hate cliffhangers myself, but i love to torture my readers with them :) thank you! :D You'll have to wait and see.... *evil smile*
lol thanks! :D you'll find out soon enough...
thank you! :D
Thank you! :D Yeah, Xemnas is evil like that, lol :) Yes, in my story Larxene's Crush I had Larxene have an older sister who terrifiyed her, hurt her, and scared her (poor Larexene) And I love your Roxas and Namine story! Its awesome, and I read it everytime there's an update (I also like to comment on it too :D) Thank you! :D *feels really happy* Larxene got what was coming to her! And about that...you'll probably hear more about it :D And I'm pretty sure I've said this before, but I'm still in love with you're avie :D *stares at Axel*
The 14th Key ~ Chapter 11 Chapter 11!!!! Will Roxas do it? Only one way to find out!!! *tries to fix camrea* ~Chapter 11~ Roxas stepped back from him, his eyes wide. He felt weak where his heart should be, and he nearly dropped the Keychain in his hand. “Wha…wha???” He choked out in disbelief. He swallowed and found his voice. “I can’t do that!” “It’s not a request, Roxas. It’s an order.” Xemnas said calmly. Roxas shook his head, anger painted on his face. “I can’t do that!” he repeated. “I won’t!!!” Xemnas laughed. “You don’t have a choice.” “Yes I do! I’m not going to hurt Xed!” Roxas shouted, before turning away to walk out of the room. “Xedramon will only get hurt more if you don’t do this.” Roxas stopped and turned around to face Xemnas with a puzzled look. “What do you mean?” He asked, not wanting to. Xemnas smirked. “Xedramon will end up losing her heart in the end, whether you take it or not.” He said. Roxas raised an eyebrow, genuinely confused. “Huh?” “Xedramon is a Keyblade Master, as are you, Roxas.” Xemnas started. “Of course, the darkness will attempt to take her heart, and will eventually succeed.” He sighed. “We can’t handle another Keyblader for the darkness…” Roxas wanted to ask him what he meant, but didn’t. “I won’t take her heart.” He said. Xemnas turned towards him. “Then I’ll be forced to kill her.” “WHATTTTT????” Roxas shouted, horrified and angered at his words. “I won’t put this Organization in danger, Roxas.” He said sternly. “But Xed’s not dangerous!” He said. “This is nonnegotiable.” Xemnas said. He took a breath. “You have three choices. You can take her heart or you can kill her. Or, I’ll kill her myself.” He hissed bitterly. Roxas gritted his teeth, holding back sudden tears. “But…I like her…” he said softly, sadness in his voice. Xemnas rolled his eyes. “Please, Roxas.” He said, uncaring. “You are a Nobody. You have no emotion. Therefore you cannot like someone.” Roxas looked down at the ground. Xemnas put his hand on his shoulder. “I’m sure she never liked you anyways.” He whispered. Lies, all lies. Roxas tore away from Xemnas’ grip and walked over to the door. He knew what he’d do. He’d tell Xed. She could leave, and he wouldn’t have to hurt her. Xemnas wouldn’t be able to hurt her. They’d meet again when it was safe. “And Roxas?” Xemnas called. Roxas stopped in the middle of the doorway, but didn’t turn around. Xemnas smiled evilly behind him. “You are to tell no one of this, or the choice shall become mine.” If Roxas had a heart, it would’ve snapped into a million pieces at his words. Roxas walked out and slammed the door closed behind him. +++ Roxas lay on his bed in his room. His mind was a swirling torrent of confusion and fear. He couldn’t take Xed’s heart. He wouldn’t. The life of a Nobody wasn’t so bad, but…he didn’t want it for her. She had so much she wanted to do that the Organization would stop. Finding her home, finding Kuxir… Roxas chuckled. He hadn’t even asked her about Kuxir. He was going to, but now it made no difference. Besides, if she lost her heart, she’d no longer feel. Her smiles wouldn’t be…the way that they were. Her laugh would lose its music. She’d be different, and he didn’t want that. But he also didn’t want her dead. If she were dead, there’d be no more smiles. There’d be no more laughs. There’d be no more Xed. The thought stirred something inside him, that threatened to let a tear run lose down his face. He shook his head of the thought. He sat up; his decision made. He took the Keychain still in his hand and hooked it to the end of his Oathkeeper Keyblade. It morphed into a sleek dark red and blue blade that seemed to seethe with darkness. He’d take her heart. +++ Xed and Roxas were standing in the arena of the outside battling area. Earlier on, Roxas had asked her if she’d like to fight against him again. She gladly agreed. He couldn’t smile thought. He had his plan. To break her heart and his own. If he had one. A few of the Organization members came to watch the fight: Axel, Demyx, Luxord, Marluxia, and Vexen. They had loved seeing the two fight last time, and were anticipating an exciting battle. Xed and Roxas readied themselves. Roxas summoned only his Oblivion Keyblade. He was saving his tainted Oathkeeper for later. Xed cocked her head, smiling. “Only one?” she asked, still smiling. Roxas nodded. She shrugged. “Okay. I’ll fight with one as well.” She summoned her Keyblade (which he had found out she called ‘Tainted Strength’), and assumed her battle position. Roxas assumed his. Vexen stood up. “Ready in 3…” he shouted. Roxas and Xed nodded to each other, as if to say good luck. “…2…” “Good luck, Roxas…” Roxas turned around. Behind him, outside of the gate, was Xemnas. He had come to make sure he did what he was supposed to. Roxas gulped and turned back around. There’d be no turning back now. “…1…” Silence. Pure silence. “…GO!!!” Roxas charged at her, Keyblade in hand. He swung at her, but she easily ducked. She swung her own Keyblade at Roxas, which nearly hit him in his head. He swung at her again, but she jumped and dodged it. She smiled. “Come on, Roxas!” she called. “Make this hard for me!” she shouted. Roxas had an idea. He could use his element against her. He then raised his hand. Xed cocked her head. What was he doing? Suddenly, an orb of light appeared in his hand. He smiled slyly. He then threw it up the air, and when it came back down, he whacked it with his Keyblade, straight at Xed. Xed, caught off guard by his strange attack, raised her Keyblade and whacked it when it came towards her like a baseball. She raised an eyebrow and smiled, impressed. “Nice one, but we’re fighting, not playing baseball!” she shouted amused. Roxas summoned another, larger light orb. “Oh, we’re definitely fighting!” he shouted back, tossing the orb into the air. It split into countless smaller light orbs. He then starting whacking the orbs at Xed at a rapid speed. She tried hitting as many as she could, but many of them hit her. Once the shower of orbs was gone, she looked up at Roxas. “I can see you’re getting better. But you’re gonna have to do better to beat me!” she shouted as she charged at him. Roxas smiled. He definitely had another plan. Right before she came close to him, he created a Corridor of Darkness and stepped inside, vanishing. Xed stopped charging and looked around. She rolled her eyes. “Roxas! Stop hiding!” she shouted to the sky. Out of the blue, a portal opened up behind Xed and Roxas jumped out, attacking her from the back. She turned around, barely blocking his attack. Before she could have a chance to strike, he created another portal and disappeared. Xed laughed. “No fair! How am I supposed to attack you if I can’t see you?” she called. Another portal opened up behind her and Roxas jumped out. “You’re not!” he shouted as he attacked. This time, she didn’t have the time to put up her Keyblade and block, so she jumped backwards, and nearly lost her balance. Roxas came swinging at her again, and she jumped back again, this time tripping and falling on the ground. She looked up at Roxas to see his Oblivion pointed at her throat. Xed smiled. “Hey! Stop stealing my move!” she said, jokingly. Roxas smiled back. “I’m not stealing it, I’m borrowing it.” He replied. She rolled her eyes. “I give! Roxas wins.” She said. There was a roar of cheering and clapping for both Keybladers from the audience of Nobodies standing nearby. “Way to take her, Roxas!” Axel called. “That was an awesome fight!” Luxord yelled. “You’ll get him next time, Xed!” Demyx shouted. Roxas’ smile faded. He could feel the cold, unforgiving, impatient glare he was receiving from Xemnas. He had to do it now. Roxas dismissed his Oblivion. He looked back at Xed, who was still on the ground, catching her breath. She smiled up at him. Roxas didn’t smile back. After this, he’d never smile again. He held out his hand. “Roxas,” Xed said, “what are you doing?” Darkness swirled around his hand, and in a flash of dark light, the red and blue Keyblade appeared in his hand. Xed looked mortified. “Roxas! That’s my stolen Keyblade! How did you…” she said, trailing off. By now the entire audience of Nobodies had grown silent. “Roxas,” Xed said, fright in her voice, “you stole it?” Roxas didn’t respond. By now his arm was shaking. He was terrified. “Xed…” he whispered. “I’m sorry…” He raised the Keyblade above his head, trying to steady it, and trying to force himself to attack her. Xed sat there are the ground, paralyzed with confusion, fright, and shock. He could dimly hear the shouts of the Nobodies watching, telling him to stop. But they were far away now. His whole body was now shaking with fear. He closed his eyes. “I’m sorry…” he choked out, close to tears. “I’m so sorry…” AH HA!!! CLIFFHANGER!!!!! DO YOU THINK HE SHOULD DO IT???
You're not allowed to have polls any more :( But nice chapter! And great job! It looks really good! :D
Thank you! I'm glad people like my stories, and that I can inspire people :D
i think i read ur stories :) thanks! and i like picking on Roxas and Zexion :)
but Zexion is awesome! :D
lol yeah! And Axel! dont forget Axel! *huggles*
thanks! you'll probably have to wait to find out...:D
lol FEAR THE BUNNIES!!!! This is awesome! Can't wait for more :)
lol you'll have to see!
Better a lot better! :D Nice story so far. If I won't be bricked, may I make just one more suggestion? Everything is sorta mashed together. It's sorta hard to read. For example, say Roxas is saying: "Hi how are you?" And Axel is saying "Fine." You would write it like this: Roxas walked up to Axel. "Hi how are you?" Axel looked at him. "Fine." he smiled. You should write it like this: Roxas walked up to Axel. "Hi how are you?" he said. Axel looked at him. "Fine." He said, smiling. It's a lot easier to read, and looks neater :) I'm sorry if it seems I'm really critical. I just think your story is fabulous, and I'd want someone to critize my work (which it has been, and I write a lot better now :)) I like your story a lot, and once again I hope I didn't discourage you in anyway...
Nice start! May I make a suggestion or two? First of all, nice idea, but could use a lot more detail. Like, instead of just making Xaldin say: "Xaldin", you could do this: Xaldin turned towards the new member. He smiled slightly. "Xaldin." he said in a deep tone. If you use more detail, your stories will be longer, and people will feel like they are more 'there' in the story. You get what I'm saying? Also, I suggest typing in Word Perfect, Microsoft Word, etc., and then copy and pasting the story into a thread. I do this, and I find I make less grammer mistakes and spelling mistakes :) Nevertheless, the story seems interesting, and I hope my critisism hasn't discouraged you in any way :) I look forward to reading more from you :D
lol glad you like it :)
Xed: YOU THINK I HAVE ISSUES????? *summons 14 keyblades* I'LL SHOW YOU ISSSUES!!!! *chases dance* XED!!! Stop!! Xed: Grrr.....*walks away* *cough* sry bout that.... You'll find out in due time, grasshopper :D thanks for reading! :D
:D thats ok :)
sweet! good luck! :D And don't worry, the story will still be here when you wake up :)
