Mish and I are a party.
Logged on just now. Still just me, but hopefully more people will feel inclined to use this later on.
Well, Mario already had one in Melee--which I'm assuming they aren't changing. Yoshi already had a decent spike with his FAir in Melee, it just shocks me that they'd give him another one (assuming Yoshi's FAir in Brawl will stay the same).
If you didn't specify a specific path for installing StepMania, when you download a song from bemanistyle's website (although I'm not sure if they're free anymore), they should be extracted into the right folder the moment you open it. This is important to know: when you unzip the file, you will have a single folder with everything inside it (the .mp3/.wav, the step file, the background image, etc). You need to place this folder inside the "Songs" folder in the StepMania directory. It's important to make sure the folder's contents are *not* in the Songs folder directly: i.e. not \Songs\song.mp3, but \Songs\SongFolder\song.mp3 From the above referenced example, when you load StepMania, the song 'SongFolder' should appear on your song list.
I only shower party with Mish. =\ We're long-time shower party partners.
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LOL @ new Yoshi Meteor Smash. That looks so overpowered.
This is in no way trying to insult your thread, but wasn't this already confirmed some time ago? It was true that Xbox > PS3 in GPU in the past, but that quickly became old news after lots of people did their own tests and did post after post showing how x5 Cell/RSX > the sh!t out of Xenos.
All the writers on this site--actually even at bigger places like FF.net or mm.org--will always have a small percentage of their readers replying. This isn't because they might not have liked it, but reviewing/posting takes time and requires effort to do. Some may like your work but just don't know what to say about it, but that doesn't make it bad. Just from personal experience, my fic on this site has reached almost 9,000 views (although many are probably the same members reading), but even then I've under 200 replies (since mine don't count). Anyway, on to your story. First off, the most important thing to remember is what sells your fic the most is the story. You can have perfect grammar and excellent lexicon but if your story doesn't captivate a reader, they won't bother reading more. Now like I've said many times before, ideas can't be critiqued or taught, so I obviously can't start telling you what to change about your story in terms of content or direction, but as a reader, I just wasn't quite captivated by your story. Your grammar is a little clumsy, so sometimes the thoughts of your characters don't carry over too well to the reader, and will more often confuse the flow of communication as we, the readers, continue reading each paragraph. However, overall these mistakes are far from anything that can't be corrected, and as a whole, what your characters are saying and doing can be understood. But my foremost criticism on this work is the tone of the fic. It's obvious that "Kingdom Hearts 2: Untitled" is a light-themed piece (or seems to be so far), and won't have an lavishly complicated plot or an incredibly ominous villain who will shake the foundations of the peaceful world that Sora and co. have finally found. Now whenever a fic is casual and light in nature, usually a writer will try to win the interest of the reader with vivid characterization, entertaining dialogue and an intimate--and perhaps comical--tone throughout. That being said, a lot of your narratives felt monotonous and definitive, and only came off even more so with some of the dialogue seeming meaningless and insignificant in context of the scene. Your opening lines with Kairi and Namine, for example. The two girls were making small talk, saying things like "Nice weather we're having" and "Of course" and after that, the scene practically finished. It's common to overuse dialogue because it's easy to believe that with the 'active' nature of characters speaking lines, it attracts the attention of the reader. However, this is only true if the lines spoken have some plot-advancing significance, or character-developing significance. Thus, contrary to popular belief, not *everything* can/should be used in dialogue. You'll find that if you cut down on the dialogue and instead summarize smaller scenes/events in narrative, there is a whole lot more creativity at your disposal to describe the mood and feelings of the characters for that particular scene. For your next chapter, try writing your narratives as if you were one of the characters (also known as first-person narrative or third-person-limited) as this may help improve the tone of the fic overall. Using first-person narrative can greatly help make this easier to do, since it may open you up to adding a personal touch to the descriptions and make them more lively and animated. I felt your narratives were lacking in this sense. Excerpt from KH2: Untitled: Here, you simply described each of their actions as separate thoughts. Now although these descriptions are incredibly accurate and we, readers, know exactly what's going on, it also lacks a sense of liveliness and character--or slightly rephrased: the tone is extremely boring. It felt like you were reciting a list: "Person 1 did this, Person 2 did that, Person 3... etc". The thought flow of the paragraph was abruptly severed into small sections, which can be improved upon. Like I mentioned before, try explaining the scene from one character's perspective. You can use first-person narrative to achieve this, but I'll use a third-person-limited style for this revision: 1st Revision (third-person-limited) I tried to keep the detail level the same as the excerpt, but you can already see how changing the perspective of the narrative can add a more intimate tone to what is being said and how the paragraph flows much more nicely. It really becomes a story told and seen by the people who lived them. You don't have to stop there; you can work on adding more details and going more in-depth with how the characters are feeling as you go along. 2nd Revision (third-person-limited): Now not only is this paragraph a whole lot longer, it explores many more facets than the 1st revision did. It adds a dimension of emotion to Roxas' thoughts as he carried out his actions, so we have some idea of how he felt and what was going through his mind as the scene goes on. As well, the additional detail that went into describing Sora as a "spiky haired brunette" and Riku being 'drawn in' by a 'certain pair of ladies', it also adds more personality to the other characters present within the scene and helps keep things from going stale and void of stagnancy by providing a variety of different visuals for your readers to imagine. Now just to clarrify something. Your original excerpt was using a style called third-person-omniscient. That is, the narrator sees all, and knows all about everything that is going on in the scene. While I did say to try describing a scene in the perspective of one character to add a more intimate tone, this doesn't make third-person-omniscient a bad style at all. In fact, sometimes there are more possibilities with using third-person-omniscient because since everything is known by the narrator, there can be so much more to say and explain at your disposal. I'll revise the 2nd revision using third-person-omniscient: 3rd Revision (third-person-omniscient): As you can see, with third-person-omniscient, it's now possible to describe the emotions of all the characters present in the scene, which can be a powerful ability to have when you're confronted with an emotion-heavy scene that is driven almost completely by the thoughts and reflections of several characters rather than their physical actions. Both third-person-omniscient and third-person-limited have their uses and their own limitations so oftentimes it's good to use both, switching back and forth when needed. There are a vast variety of ways to explain a single event, and depending on what you want to get across to your reader will determine which style of storytelling will be best to use. The perspective, as well as a carefully structured lexicon will all help to accurately convey the right emotion, thought, or idea to your reader. Keep experimenting with your writing and you'll eventually develop an arsenal of ways that you know work for you.
Wait, what?
Is that a challenge toward me? D: Why..
*imagines a wide, spacious plain with countless women in wedding dresses frolicking about* XD Anyway, Atari/Darky answered this question perfectly, and as such this thread will be closed. - Closed - PM with objections.
Very awesome. Yeah, I've heard a lot of good things about Skype. My parents use it to talk with relatives in the Philippines for free. For those who aren't familiar, it also supports audio/video chats as well for video conferencing.
Conincidentally, episiode 135 aired in Japan several hours ago today. *will watch it soon*
I never said we evolved from insects. Those fossils are probably some ancestor to some living insect species that is living today. Although that doesn't explain how humans might've evolved from apes, the concept is the same. Evolutionary theory encompasses the steady progression of ALL living species, not just humans. That's why those fossils of sea creatures in relevant to this topic.
Does Skype support more than a two-way conversation? I hear Skype has clearer reception than some landlines, and it's actually a $0 way to talk long-distance.
splitoverload's way is the simplest way, -.-; http://zirc.org/chat Type in your username, then join the channel "#kh-vids"
Are insects not allowed to evolve? And pardon me for not knowing the specific scientific study on those particular species, but my point was that fossils are a substantial part of evolutionary theory. You immediately said those fossils didn't. But that's incorrect.
Actually... they do. Fossils are a big part of evolutionary theory.
Well, Alice made a good point. The Opera internet browser has IRC built in, I went to check it out myself. It's a lot easier (although if you don't really use Opera to browse, then it's kinda the same as downloading a third-party program anyway) It's quite an easy walkthrough if you needed any help with setting it up. - EDIT - Stickied for now I suppose
