Excellent job. Chapter 1 was better than Chapter 2, I think. But it's some good writing, which is hard to find in fanfics. Remember, always start a new paragraph when a new character speaks. Like this: Sora looked at Riku. “You know, I think Kairi is probably really worried by now.†Riku sighed. “She’s probably at home spazzing because we aren’t there.†“No kidding,†Sora replied. And if only two characters are talking, it's pretty safe to leave off the dialogue tags every once in a while.
I remember this being discussed before, but oh well. That's Roxas. I have learned how to differentiate every member of he Organization with their hoods up, and that looks like Roxas to me. Roxas has those shoulder proportions, and stands with his hips forward like that. The perspective is all that makes him look taller.
Great job, yet again! I think the Zexion battle was the best yet. And I'm glad to see something exciting is going on in Radiant Garden now. Besides a battle, of course. ^^; Well, anyway, keep up the good work!
I've never managed to beat Riku on the first race, which is of course the important one (*Rolls eyes*), or in a fight on Destiny Islands. Tips for racing him though are: remember that part of the brigde falls in the beginning of the race, use the zipline, or Riku will, it's the fastest way down, even with the time it takes to climb the ladder, come back across the treetops (that's the fastest line I know of), and try not to lose your composure, because you'll definitely lose then. ^^
I got Final Form while leveling up Wisdom in TWTNW. *Shrugs.* Can't give you any advice other than TWTNW has a higher chance of driving Final Form.
<_< Riku.
Agreed. Avatar is pretty original. And your evidence is pretty flimsy.
Yeah, there's a pinned thread for XIV member discussion.
Wow, it just keeps getting better and better! Great job, except I don't think "accusatorily" is a word. "Accusationally" is, though. ;)
ROFL. Foxxie, you are a comedic genius! And Luxord is finally going to get Xigbar, huh?
Both lines were said by Xemnas. He's saying that Roxas looks a lot like Sora.
Just going to put in my two cents on the XIV Member. I do not think she is Aqua. And here's some of my proof: The proof that most people hang their assumption on is the video in KH2: FM+, where Xemnas enters the Room of Sleep and converses with Aqua's armor. But also in that video, Xigbar and Zexion are talking about the Organization. Xigbar has been ordered by Xemnas to recruit new members. And he says the newest member at that time is MARLUXIA. It's also obvious that Aqua is not alive/a regular human any longer, since Xemnas has possession of her armor and Keyblade. If Aqua had become a Nobody, Xigbar would have recruited her into the Organization then. But the latest member was Marluxia, and not Quaax or something like that. I have some more evidence as well, if you'd like to argue with me.
LOL. I can imagine them having girl talk time. *Cracks up.*
Donald can get pretty annoying. I managed to tune out his voice after a while, though. :P And if Japanese voices count, I'm saying Mickey, too. It was just... weird.
Well, I had a sudden strike of inspiration. Very, very short AkuRoku piece. More platonic than anything, because that's how I veiw AkuRoku. It's loosely based on the scene where Roxas is fleeing the Organization and is confronted by Axel. It's not perfect, and I'm not writing any more on it than this bit. Read and critique please. *** Axel stepped out of the shadows cast by the neon signs of the World that Never Was. “You can’t leave the Organization, Roxas. They’ll tear you apart.†“The more I think about it, the more I have to know, Axel.†Roxas replied, his back turned to Axel. He had been in mid-flight when the other man had found him. “I wield the Keyblade. I have to know why. Who I was. Besides, no one would miss me.†“You know that’s not true, Roxas. I may not have a heart, but I sure do know what it’s like to have it torn out.†“We both know that there’s no heart in you to rip out.†Axel leaned back against the gray bricks of an empty building. “No, and you have no heart to follow to your past. But somehow, we both do. Strange, isn’t it? We both found what the whole Organization has been searching for, through nothing more than each other.†“No, Axel. Quit fooling yourself. And quit talking to me. I’m leaving the Organization. And that’s final.†Axel’s bright green eyes searched for a clue in Roxas’ back. “No, you’re just denying it. Trying to justify leaving in your mind. You know how the rest of them are, Roxas. You know you can’t leave me here. You know what my job in the Organization is. And you know that the Superior won’t let you get away with running off. Not when you wield the Keyblade.†“You’re not thinking right, Axel. Think with your brain, not whatever ‘heart’ you may or may not have. I have to go, because I wield the Keyblade, not in spite of it. And I need to know why.†“When you leave, I’ll lose the ‘heart’ you’ve given me. And I’ll only have memories.†“At least you have those!†Roxas whipped around, tears forming in his blue eyes. He was surprised to see Axel standing directly in front of him. He had been several feet away. Axel looked down at Roxas solemnly. “You can’t leave.†“I have to.†Roxas turned again, walking briskly away from Axel. This time, bright green eyes filled with tears. *** A lot better than my attempt at humor, huh? Be harsh. I can take it. I might write a Sora/Kairi piece like this later. Except less angsty.
Yes. I cried for, like, three chapters in Half-Blood Prince when Dumbledore died. And that's just the first instance that came to mind.
I don't think that Sora and Riku are gay. Mainly because of the fact that Sora is in love with Kairi. I also agree with most of what Repliku said. Sora and Riku are best friends. And best friends care for each other a lot, but not in the same way as a romantic couple. *Shrugs.* Mostly I think it's a product of yaoi fangirls and that scene towards the end of KH2 where Sora cries.
Ultima. Yes, Fenir has higher strength, but I like the Ultima Weapon's ability better.
Riku, definitely.
That's pretty much the biggest copout ever. And I don't think it's a dream. It's been going on for quite a while. And what about the R/R version of CoM? Sora couldn't have dreamed that up, I'm pretty sure. Plus the prequel games. :/