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  1. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    Some more of my random failing -__- *subjects you to it*

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    Frozen rivers running deep and blue
    They flow like a path, leading me straight to you
    Snow falls gently and covers the trees
    There is a scent of magic lingering in the breeze
    The air so cold and the night so still
    I close my eyes and remember our last dance
    Our last kiss, Our last chance
    It wasn't far from here, when I heard that song play
    It remains in my memory with each passing day
    But you left with the winter, defeated by spring
    And my dreams melted with the snow
    But that was all so long ago
    Maybe this year will be the year I find you again
    A momentary heart beat, a fleeting pause
    I open my eyes and look around
    Fresh fallen snow covers the ground
    And finally I know that you wont ever come back
    I open my arms and look upto the sky
    I dance by myself trying not to cry
    I lie down on the ground and remember that day
    I wanted forever to be that way
    Rivers run slower and all grows cold
    I faintly hear that music and I long to sing
    And think of the memories it used to bring
    Now there is nothing, only the cold
    The cold and the night
    I will lie here and dream until maybe one day
    You will come back and we can dance away
    It all grows quiet and I think of your voice
    the words you told me, and the way you held me
    If I think harder I can still remember your touch
    Still remember your kiss
    I still remember everything
    But now I will just wait
    To melt away with the snow
    And leave with the coming of the Spring
     
  2. .Kairi. Kingdom Keeper

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    I like it! Great writing :D
     
  3. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    ^^ thank you very much :)
     
  4. O R A N G E C is the heavenly option

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    ZOMG CtR!! You didn't subject us to it! We wanted to read it!

    All your poems are amazing.

    I could really relate to a lot of what you're saying. It's really great poetry.

    *clappies*
     
  5. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    ^^ omg thank you :) *hugs*

    :) thats an awesome thing to say ^^
     
  6. Yami*no*Hime Merlin's Housekeeper

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    wow......that is awsome
     
  7. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    :) I am very glad you liked it ^^
     
  8. Kingdom Glory Banned

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    That...was...beautiful...
    -hugs-
    I LOVE IT =D
     
  9. cronoking Chaser

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    You told me this one would suck, but you lied. It's really great. I titally loved it because I could imagine the whole thing. You're so good at poetry ^_^
     
  10. Hakurei Reimu Take my hand. And then I'll fly with you right up

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    Wow, this is some great stuff. Man, wat do u get in English class. An A? (I'd be pretty surprised if u didn't. This is an A++ work here)
     
  11. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    *hugs* thanks

    :glomp: ^^ thanking you :) I am glad that it did that ^^

    also I didnt lie! I honestly did think it sucked -__-


    :) I don't do English anymore ^^ so thank you! I am glad I havnt lost my use of the language :)
     
  12. Soulright Merlin's Housekeeper

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    Once again, your choice of words are excellent and you keep a steady pace through the whole thing. Creative and imaginitave. I would not call this "random failing", more like "expressive work" that came out wonderfully. What kind of title would you call this? XD

    Keep up the writting. ^^
     
  13. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    >_> titles are my downfall xDDD I can never find the right one that fits (which is why none of them have titles except for I think 2)

    Thank you for the compliment ^^ and of course I will keep writing xD it's an addiction almost :)

    n.n Thank you :)
     
  14. TabbyRoxas Twilight Town Denizen

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    Wow, that was cool. Your words were very well thought out.

    5/5 CtR!

    :roll: