^^ it is a poem :)

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  1. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    Hmmm so this is from the perspective of a character I am currently writning a short story about. I hope it's liked ^^





    I can hear the rain falling
    But I'm not sure whether its from outside
    or from the memories in my mind
    I remember the last words you said
    and though I couldnt see
    I knew you had that smile in your eyes.

    I keep thinking
    If I had known? would I have done thing different?
    There was still so much more we had to talk about
    So many things left unsaid

    You promised me forever
    And now thats how long Ill be left
    Wishing that I could go back
    Go back just once to see you smile again

    Wait for me
    And one day maybe
    We'll finish the dance we never got the chance to really start



    I'll move on and make my way
    But I'll still think of you with each passing day
    I close my eyes and I can almost feel you near
    But still so distant that it makes the emptyness seem darker
    I will smile and remember the fun
    and I will laugh at those games we would play
    And one day when it's over
    I'll see you and speak the words we never got to say
     
  2. Sabby Sleepy Panda Assassin

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    That's such a sweet poem. It's sad. T^T But I love it
     
  3. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    Thanx ^^ I'm glad!
     
  4. 2Foxxie4U ~The Forgotten Crusader...~

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    It is very touching... ='3

    I don't see very much mistkes - the ones that ARE there are so small you barely notice them, so I'm not going over 'em... yada yada yaaaa....

    Great poem! :D
     
  5. JellyBeing ALL. THE. BUTTS.

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    Nice poem.






    >teh awesome text filler<
     
  6. Desmonic Kingdom Keeper

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    Cool poem! It's a sad one, but it's still very cool. Good job! :D
     
  7. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    Thank you people! *hugs* thanx! ^^
     
  8. Desmonic Kingdom Keeper

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    Your welcome!! I'm sure that good poems/stories always get good replies..
     
  9. AkuseruVIII Banned

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    I'm not too into poetry as I find it hard to understand. This one was good. I don't really know too much about style but I think it's done what it was supposed to as both a technical piece and an emotional one. It made me sad. At least I didn't cry though.
     
  10. Very Berry Gummi Ship Junkie

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    hey i really like your poem it's really nice a bit sad but fabulous
     
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    It's so cute but sad.It touched me deeplyT^T
     
  12. xiegin Destiny Islands Resident

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    Its a really good poem heh nic job its sad but its nic :D
     
  13. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    Thank you everyone ^^ :o
     
  14. saxoR_vs_aroS Hollow Bastion Committee

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    i already PMed you, but it rocks.