My first Piece of Writing to post here[CnC allowed.]

This may be a Crap, so feel free to criticise(The spelling is UK English)

What’s the matter with you?
What’s wrong with you?
Is it the only thing you''re good at?

Your flesh degrades
Your confidence fades
Now do you think you're all that?

You stabbed my back
I’m sure of that
Who the **** do you think I am?

When we meet
Revenge will be sweet
When I rip your body apart

When the dust clears
I’ll be very near
To the point of break

When I break
I’ll be burned at the stake
Making only filthy ash.

 

Very powerfully written TR, it has a lot of emotion and thought within it that is clearly expressed.

I would hate to be the one to cross you :sweatdrop:

Good work, you should post more up.

^^​

 

And by that you mean? Sorry :stupid:

 

Erm to cross someone is to piss them off, be the one who got in their way.

So after reading this poem I would hate to be the one to piss you off xDDD


Thats the clearest way to put it ^^ you're not stupid! ​

 

Thanks for That CtR!

 

No problem ^^

It really was a good piece xD *reps*

WRITE MORE :yelling:​

 

wow thats cool :D

You should lengthen it though :D

 

I ran out of Inspiration (Writer's Block)

Oh I will:roll:
My 5th Grade Teacher told me I had a Talent for Poetry.
This one is the first one I've made in many Months...

 

Lol its still good...I'm only good at writing stories..except for when it comes to the ending...then I get Writer's Block xD