My hate for you

Discussion in 'Archives' started by AlexleHoshi, Mar 13, 2007.

  1. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Don’t be shocked that I hate you so
    Even if I have no reason to
    Nothing you can do will change the hate that fills my heart
    Every time I look at you
    I care not what happens to you
    For I will not moan if you were to die
    That is how much I hate you so

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    Thanks to RikuSoraKairiOwn for his help, I asked him to give me an emotion to write about and he gave me hate, so thanks RikuSoraKairiOwn
     
  2. Mr. Van Whippy ♥ Biscuits and cookies

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    It's good, but not that good. And i think it's too small. You have make way better poems than this.
     
  3. Ratchet Bah weep graaagnah wheep ni ni bong!

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    It's forceful and sent a shudder down my spine as I read it. A good poem.
     
  4. no bad...

    Not bad.

    (word word)
     
  5. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Thanks you three, I had a bit of writers block again so that's why this isn't as good as my best
     
  6. Axel Chaser

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    Lines are good apart from #3 and the two last ones, they kinda ruin it and it's flow.