Sadness

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  1. Laplace TSUKI NO SHIHAI

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    What is sadness
    How it exists the sadness
    That is what I think
    Sadness is what I feel

    My heart break
    The shards fly
    Up in the skies
    Sadness is what I feel

    The clouds rises
    The sky is dark
    The sun hides
    Sadness is what I feel

    And in the night
    I watch the stars
    They wall like tears
    Thought my cheeks
    Sadness is what I feel

    This is my first time, so I already know it´s crappy, I writed it when I was depressed.
     
  2. Nymph of Destiny Chaser

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    It's beautiful...it conveys sadness very well. Although, I think you meant to say "felt" or "feel" instead of "fell"...
     
  3. Laplace TSUKI NO SHIHAI

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    Thanks, and I repaired that.