some of my new song

You all know i made a thread like this in the creativty corner well i posted it here so more people can see if its bad then close this

Genere:sounds kinda like ive become so numb

I'm trying to make a song heres some

first your livin
then your dieying.
first your in heaven
then your in hell
but you can't see to find the person you call my gal.
Now every step that i take
is a life long mistaaaaaaaaake
(long mistake)


{chorus}
I can't see the light
theres nothing in sight
the hell with it i will blow my mind
I can't see the light
it's not there anymore
so let me go i will be alright
{chorus}



thats all i have for now.