(KHV Musical)Jayn's Plot

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  1. Jayn

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    If you would like to contribute to the plotting and further expand on the story before it's time to vote on which plot to go with for the Visual Novel, please use this thread to do so! Without further delay~

    THE PLOT



    (Unrelated to anything: Please remember to like the posts of the plots you like by the 10th!!)

    Alright...So based off of some of the plots mentioned so far, I present my plot idea for the KHV Musical /dramatica music
    I have massively simplified some of the overly-complicated stuff so that it's more realistically do-able. NOTE: Not ALL plots are fuses here. Just the once that /CAN/ be obviously and easily fused.

    / / Main Characters

    A new member (original character, most likely).
    An un-banned member.
    A normal member.
    A premium.
    A staff member.

    Why: Representation. Not all staff, not all normies, not all OCs, not all prems, etc. Main does not mean only, it just means maybe a bit more of a key role in the plot or a bit deeper character development. The only real main character, I believe, should be the new member/OC. Fair on all fronts, yeah?

    Using this random generator, I got a lesbian female for the main character named Aaliyah LOL. I'm just going to use that for now for the purpose of the plot, but things can be replaced/moved around.

    //Setting(s)

    KH-Vids will be a physical place. Fusing this with the school/university idea, I've made a small and unfinished map.

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    As you can see, it's almost like a university setting. Similar. Also, I'm kind of joking about the whole ominous staff
    thing. The playground is separate from fun and games. Instead, it's a literal field just a bit away from the buildings going South, where games are played and stuff. It's set up a bit like a camp. Allow me to explain. (Note: These aren't the actual names for all of this places yet, hah.)

    Staff Headquarters Obviously the place staff hang out, discuss issues and make major decisions. I believe there should be sleeping quarters here for them too, just to spice things up. I put trees around it because I think it would be really cool to expand on the hidden-ness of it and make it seem a bit cut off from the rest of the forum, in an exciting way. Traversing though a dark, thick forest and arriving at the Staff HQ sounds neat. /imagery

    Registration Another obvious place. When arriving to KH-V, new members register here at the registration office. Members leaving will also have to put in a resignation/departing notice here and physically 'leave'. Banned members or exiled members are just ... kicked out and unable to return for ... some reason I don't care to think up at.

    Living Quarters Sort of like dorms. A physical building with bedrooms and stuff. Everyone gets their own room.

    Banquet Hall We eat here. No matter what drama is going on, we have three scheduled times. Breakfast, lunch and dinner. We can eat there or in the Playground (not pictured) during those times.

    Community Center This is where events take place. Things like Mixtape Mania, KHV Chorus, Podcasts, and other things. We'll of course have to expand on how these things would go physically. For instance, KHV Chorus would obviously be a choir, etc. Should also have a mini-theater for KHV Movie anime/night, etc. There will also be a counseling office there. (Help with Life).

    Prem Hangout I think this building should, in honor of our beautiful prem section, pretty much be empty and terrible LOL. Some raggedy couches, dust piling up. Barely anyone goes there.

    Creativity Corner Where our creative members roam. The RPers (or actors), the singers and artists, writers... There should be a lot of art rooms, and computer rooms here with graphic programs. Studios for recording and composition, instruments, a stage, etc.

    Interests Where are quirky and knowledgeable members hang out. A debate hall and discussion hall, video game rooms, a library, maybe some more computer rooms and other interest-related ones.

    Hacks & Codes Pretty much a building with even more computer rooms (LOL) and ... stuff on hacking, I don't know anything about this section tbh.

    Fun and Games And here we have pretty much the Spamzone. Loud, obnoxious (in a fun way) and very borderline. In summary, a large hang out room. Snacks, chairs and couches, music, partying and fun. We also have Forum Families -- or in other words, along with the large lounge in the front of the building, we have multiple rooms for 'rent' where groups of people (family) can go to talk and mess around , yadda.

    //Member Types
    Here is my idea of how to present us as physical members. Instead of posts, I believe we should receive physical coins or currency. You get them by engaging with the community. Attending events, and talking to certain people. Those with over $1000 become premium members and can exchange them instead for a badge or license that states so. They then get special access to the Prem Hangout and also some Prem-exclusive events held in the Community Center.

    Banned (banished/exiled) Banned members are those who have done something bad or committed a crime. As punishment, Staff has ... pretty much kicked them out of KHV.

    Alt Accounts Member who were either banished or gone for a while, returned with a new 'alias' and in some cases a disguise or a new look. Very mysterious, usually.

    Normals Obvious. Members who haven't gathered enough coins to become prem, or don't want to.

    Premiums Members who have been around and earned enough coins to get their Premium License (or badge).

    Sectional Moderators Moderators who usually stay in one area of KHV. For instance, you would be most likely to find What? working at the Registration Office.

    Super Moderators Staff members who wander around in all areas of the forum. There's no definite place to find them, but they're usually around somewhere keeping things in check.

    Admins Misty and RvR will mostly be found at Staff HQ keeping things in check from the top. Sometimes they'll make appearances in other places, but there's always someone back at HQ.

    Note: You can tell who is staff by the color of their clothes.

    //Inspiration
    Okay, so here are the main things that I will try to fuse and summarize in this plot, along with my own ideas. This is in no way official, just my idea and attempt to gather some of us together and bring some unity about before the 10th.

    • One by one, they approach their professor for advice on their problems, ranging from anything like relationship problems to fears of financing their studies to suicidal thoughts. Troubled by the students despair, the professor decided to turn the class into a support group. (Janson)
    • So what if we were to write a story about a member who has just joined the site and being taken around the sections of the forum, where people apparently break out into song, and he gets to know the culture of KHV. The songs could be about certain sections, members and/or memes of the forum. (GS)
    • My only idea is a world set a bit into the future. Where the Kingdom Hearts series has finally stopped without their ever being a conclusion. (FuzzyBlueLights)
    • announces the cancellation of the KH series and that KHV is being shut down since the for it have been cut off.
      Members are starting to leave, friends are saying goodbye, loves that have formed are being tested, groups say their finals farewell. Some characters still linger for a bit finishing up with KHV before it's finally shut down.
      Now at this point, a new member joins KHV, the Protagonist, who starts talking to the clicks and people who are all giving up on the site. The Protagonist resolves to help bring the site back up, and proposes....(PaW)
    • Also, there's a side plot with two members in love who are dying to meet each other (because every musical needs a love song). (Tummer)
    • Anyways we'd explore how the site activity is influenced by their everyday life and how their everyday life in turn goes through some dramatic change due to their time spent online. All the musical numbers would be representations of online communication to create a distinction between the online world and the real one. ... (Jiku)
    • The classes could easily tell each other apart by the color of their workclothes (which will be just the member/staff team colors (white for Regular Members, pink for Preminum Members, red for Moderators, etc.)) (Flowergothic)
    • OC has become a “Returned” - a free member after dropping his permaban sentence due to the appeal passing by one vote of an unknown staff member, the Savior, who constantly haunts OC as the “granter of their freedom”. Though OC is technically free, their “Returned” status makes them a social outcast. (What?)
    //Plot Summary
    I'll go into great detail about some things. Others I'll rush through just to get the point across and move on, heh.

    Basically...

    KH-Vids is a place on the Internet. Our story follows a new member, a premium member, a staff member, a normal member and a returned banned member. There are two major settings. One is, obviously, KH-V. The other is our physical world. The only members to be shown off-site will be our main ones. Events on the site will be dramatized and translated into physical happenings (KHV Chorus happening will be translated into a physical choir, and so on).

    We'll start with the new member (original character) and in the physical world. Aaliyah (15), is struggling in the physical world. Her parents are going through a divorce, her grades are slipping and she's being bullied (because she's a lesbian according to this generator). To deal with what's going on at home, Aaliyah has formed a semi-unhealthy habit of neglecting her responsibilities to cruise the Internet, play video games and make AMVs. She's really passionate about this, btw, over 5k subs on YT and everything.

    A girl that she has a crush on (also her best friend) has introduced her to the Kingdom Hearts series and encouraged her to play the games, especially the first two, since they're her favorite. Upon finishing the games, she's decided she wants to make an AMV for this girl's birthday. She Googles 'Kingdom Hearts Cutscenes' and is brought to our very lovely KH-Vids.

    This is our first introduction to KH-V as a physical place. Aaliyah steps foot in KH-Vids, and wanders around the site. She views members interactions, and just kind of gets a general feel for the place. Initially, she's not considering actually joining, but as she flails around looking for the Cutscene Archive (not pictured), What? steps in and directs her to the Registration Office, unintentionally guilting her into signing up with his babbling on (<3) about how great new members are, and how wonderful the forum is, yadda yadda [#1]. She's greeted pretty passively by other members and logs off feeling pretty neutral about the site. She falls asleep listening to her parents fight.

    A day or two later, Aaliyah logs on again. She had been so swept up in joining KHV that she never downloaded the cutscenes. When she arrives, the forum is in a bit of a panic. It has been announced thatKingdom Hearts won't be continuing as a series, and that there will not be a conclusion or ... well, anything more to it. Let's just say Nomura has a break down or something and ragequits, LOL. In this flurry of events, it has also been announced that KH-Vids is being shut down. The owner no longer thinks he'll make a profit off of the site, considering what it's based off of is now dead, and no one from KH-Vids has enough money to buy it from him. The owner is very seriously considering a deal with someone who wants to make it into a porn site.

    Aaliyah is kind of thrown into an awkward position. KH-Vids doesn't really mean much to her at the moment, and she's finding it hard to empathize, due to her 'real life' problems. She considers leaving, heading back to the Registration Office to 'depart', but she stumbles upon a staff member. Staff is in a meeting right now at HQ, but this staff member seems to be in an emotional fit. Instead of being at HQ, staff member is sitting on the grass in the Playground area fuming or crying (depending on which staff member it is). They express how much KH-V means to them [#2], and their determination to keep the site up. They say that staff is currently discussing the shut down, but they'd rather avoid talk of giving up. They ask for Aaliyah's help, and once again guilted, she agrees to do so.

    The staff member brings them to HQ and is at first met with rage and 'y u do this tho', but after expressing themselves, they get staff support to try to keep KH-V alive. They come up with a plan to raise money to buy the site from the owner.

    During dinner that night, staff make the announcement. Most members are either neutral or supportive, but there's one member (the unbanned) that's raising a fuss for some reason. They're completely against trying to raise money to keep the site up. They believe that if it's time for the site to go, everyone should just let it go. [#3] Unbanned logs offline.

    The story is now taking place from Unbanned's point of view. We get insight on their at-home life which is pretty ... bland, to say the least. They're not in a very good spot, financially. We later learn through Aaliyah's prodding (back on site) that their hesitance to raise money comes from the fact that they don't have anything to contribute. They feel that whoever donates will be hailed as the 'saviors-of-KHV' or something dramatic like that, and they feel a bit ashamed that they have nothing to give. Aaliyah assures them that that won't be the case and says there are many way to help such as being positive and supportive, BLAH MORE DETAIL NEEDED END ARK.

    After that resolution, Aaliyah has another problem. She's feeling pretty depressed about things and has found herself logging onto KH-V a lot more often now to escape from her physical troubles. It seems her best friend has obtained a boyfriend, which depresses her in more ways than one. Her father has also left the house and her mother doesn't know if he'll return. The staff member from earlier suggests that she visit the counseling office. She doesn't want to, but is eventually roped into it by the unbanned member (she is now friends with both of these members). The head of the counseling office is a premium member. Not officially, but the premium member lurks around enough to practically be moderator there.

    Aaliyah vents to the premium member, and premium member gives advice about being happy, persevering and keeping your chin up. [#4] Aaliyah feels a bit better (or at least functional) and leaves to participate in a game at the Playground with unbanned member and staff member. When she leaves, premium member logs off and we now get a glimpse of their at home life. It is riddled with busy! Not negative or bland like before. They're juggling a lot with school and work and friends, and KH-V is more of a way to unwind after their busy days.

    When we're back online, we're in the perspective of Aaliyah who's sitting in a meeting with the other members discussing how far they've come with donations and how much more money is needed. At this point, we're almost at our goal, but time is running short. During the meeting, a member suddenly stands and runs out of Community Center crying. A normal member stands up, but hesitates, sitting back down and sighing dramatically. After the meeting, Aaliyah and Premium member approach the normal member, who is still sitting down as everyone else leaves.

    They ask him what's wrong, and the love story begins. Apparently, he's decided to donate money that he's been saving up to KH-V. The money was going towards meeting his long-distance girlfriend (crying member) over the summer. She's crushed, but not against it. Aaliyah and premium member try to cheer him up and he's grateful, but still bummed. He explains his long-distance romance. [#5]

    He eventually logs out and we see some nice long-distance relationship stuff such as him having a talk with his girlfriend, asking if she was okay from earlier when she logged off. They talk, and eventually come to understand that it'll all be okay.

    With his donation, KH-V reaches it's goal! Premium member, unbanned member, staff member, normal member and Aaliyah are now really good friends at this point. Everything is great and the site is bought successfully. Happy number. [#6]

    We return to Aaliyah's life at home. Things aren't magically fixed (though her dad does return home), but throughout her experience she has gained the confidence and strength to continue with her life without sinking into ultimate despair. She realizes that no matter how alone she may feel, she never is. It's a simple matter of logging on.

    / End.

    Now at this point I'm thinking it is only the end of Act 1. If so, then Act 2 should expand on the return of the KH series / the road trip or appeal PaW suggested. However, I am also thinking it could act as left room for a sequel to expand on that! I think we should leave room for a sequel and end it here, because this is a really BASIC skeleton of my idea, and we already have 6 original song numbers to be composed, five main characters to expand on, and much more to add--For instance, we will most likely add onto community events and happenings around the forum...

    Also, the numbers = potential musical numbers.


     
  2. flowergothic Twilight Town Denizen

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    Wow, I'm kinda surprised that one of the most random things about my plot idea helped contribute to this one. =p

    But this all looks good, I think the unbanned member should also be an OC though, mainly because if a regular member is cast as the unbanned, that could cause the member to have an emotional breakdown/fit/etc.
     
  3. Jayn

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    Thank you! Funnily enough, though, I've had two members who are unbanned ask for the part if we did this so I don't think they'd mind. xD Well, not everyone. Some people would want to be that character!

    Some stuff I'd like to iron out also are things like the Original Character. Should we stick with the girl? Or we can make another one and replace things.

    I also wanted to clarify something. This will be a Visual Novel, so all of the different parts...For example, the how we go from the OC to staff member to the unbanned to the premium to the normal member, this can all be integrated into the VN ark-style.

    For those of you who have never played a VN before, this means that when you're playing the game you can kind of choose different paths. It's not all linear, you get to pick who's story you go to first and such.

    In addition to that, I think it would be fun to have a currency system, which I explained briefly. You would get points for playing the game and talking to people and making certain choices. Once you reach 1000 points, you become a premium member and can unlock bonus content and extra storylines.

    In addition to THAT, since it's a game, I would also like to have some interactions that are kind of like mock KHV-events. Like, you can choose to go visit the KHV chorus, RP Arena, and other areas.

    I also want to figure this out: What kind of music style should this particular VN have? We can't have random, clashy things. It should be somewhat uniform.

    Like, in conclusion, I think that since it's a Visual Novel we should actually pay attention to those aspects. There's no point in it being a game/VN if it's just a linear, boring, non-interactive musical.

     
  4. What? 『 music is freedom 』

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    Opinion bombardment time!

    1. We can perhaps flesh our her character more and give her a permanent name.

    2. Different paths sound grand as long as they do not tangle up the story too much? I am simply hoping with this that the actual paths will still be smoothly experienced regardless of their order. Would there be different endings?

    3. Currency sounds fun, especially for those uses!

    4. Would these entail small minigames or sub-stories or some such?

    5. Hrm. This is my bias but I feel that multiple genres could fit together, but clearly not so very clashy like you said (e.g. nope nope to Busta Rhymes + Mozart or the like). If music creates atmosphere of the sort, then I feel that there can be some variation but with a base on a certain type of music that would relate to all of the variations? I actually feel music which uses orchestral instruments would perhaps be the most versatile in such a case. Using simple tools one can blend together the items at their disposal to create many unique and versatile variations.
     
  5. Jayn

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    Oh yes, the paths will be experiences smoothly regardless. I don't know about alternative endings. I don't think so. As you know, that complicates things and makes the screenplay writing ... difficult. Which is also why I think the games and stuff should unlock bonus stories instead of actually change the ends and such.

    Also, variation is good with the music. I meant more like Busta Rhymes + Mozart clashing. xD I don't know. I think we should go with modern music? Modern because most of the musicians on KHV are more likely to be experienced in somewhat modern music. Instruments like pianos and violins and guitars and stuff. And then, of course, technology happens, etc.
     
  6. Jiku Neon Kingdom Keeper

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  7. Jayn

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    Thank you!
    Well, what would you prefer and have in mind specifically for the character? Gender, age and actual story/background? Since this is the time to really settle into a specific and flesh out the plot officially. What would be a specific acceptable bland character to you and how would they be infused into the plot? o:




    I agree, but I also think we should have a slight idea of what type of genre since it would probably influence the overall atmosphere of the VN. For instance, my first thought was modern--though I like all sorts of music--specifically because the majority of actual composers/producers on the site who make full fledged music and pieces seem to be based around either the video game genre, or modern music and digital/virtual instruments, which also ties into the semi-modern flare of this particular plot with the university like platform and such. Of course, later down the road when we actually get to composition, I'm sure we'll expand on this sort of thing as you're saying.

    I agree, but another big reason I would like to implement the more game-like mechanics is to make it worth playing. I was originally against a Visual Novel styled musical because I felt it over complicated the whole thing. We're going to have a playable game and also a video of someone playing through the game, but I personally wouldn't see a reason to download/install/play the same experience I could just watch if there's no major difference in interaction level. If that makes sense. I just want it to be worth playing, I guess.
     
  8. Jiku Neon Kingdom Keeper

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    “Aliya, you're going to be late.” Emilia called from the door. From underneath her straight brown fringe her mischievous eyes peeked into the house. She was welcome to step through the open door and she knew it well but she would instead always wait patiently by the front door for her friend to make her way down. For some unknown reason she seemed to take pleasure in it. Another thing that might always remain a mystery.
    “I know, I know.” Aliya was about two inches shorter than Emi and always running about ten minutes behind her. As long as she'd known Emi, she'd known what it felt like to follow. Emi was always the leader and even now she was taking the time to lead her to school. Not that Aliya minded. They were friends, best friends, Aliya reminded herself.
    Emi stole a glance at her watch and began prodding further. “Like you're not going to make it at all late. Like standing outside the classroom with buckets late. Like--”
    “Alright, I'm here.” Aliya huffed, her sweater hanging slightly askew on her small shoulders. Emi took the time to straighten it and brush a few of Aliya's curls into place before motioning that she follow. Yes, that was Emi. Always leading her on.
    “What was taking you?” The taller girl chirped gleefully. She seemed to already have an idea of her own.
    “Let's just go, okay?” Aliya picked up her pace and tried to pass her fellow. She didn't want to admit that she'd overslept because she was up late staring at some less than wholesome images online.
    “Problematic problems plaguing people's perfectly panoramic and picturesquely pleasant... um... partnership? Painting? Pedaling? Peregrination!” She shouted clapping her fist down into her open palm triumphantly. “That was a nine combo. That's a daily record!”
    “No, I don't have a problem. I just overslept.” Aliya groused in the wake of her friend's jubilation.
    “Depressed people oversleep a lot. Are you depressed?” Emi stared at her with her head just tilted enough to make her look goofy rather than quizzical.
    “No. I'm fine. Seriously, fine as a fiddle.”Aliya continued to brush her off.
    “The saying is 'fit as a fiddle', my sadly uncultured comrade in arms.” Sighed Emi who then crossed her arms and began making tut tut tut sounds whilst wagging a disapproving finger.
    “Well excuse me, princess.”
    “A lowly knave such as I, called a princess by one so lofty as thou? Forsooth! I shall make haste to--”
    “Okay, no more old English.”
    “Modern English.” Emi corrected again. “Shakespeare and Elizabeth were Modern English.
    “You know it is possible for you to go like five minutes without correcting me.”
    “That would imply you'd be able to go five minutes without the need.” She grinned.
    “I'm not a child.”
    “Never said you were. Come on. When did this become not fun?”
    “It's not that it's not fun talking to you, I just do see why you need to be such a know it all about everything I say.”
    “Maybe if you listened more you'd know it all too. Way I see it, you spend way too much time on the surfer webs catching net waves with your cyber punks.”
    “How old are you again?”
    “I'm younger than you by a whole month plus two.”
    “And yet you talk about the internet like it's some kind of new invention. Like it's magic.”
    “I only trust things I understand and the face-y spaces and Mycenaean books just weird me out. They give me a veritable case of the heebie jeebies. So it's the good old fashioned library for me.”
    “Everything at the library is online.”
    “And yet I'm the know it all?”
    “It's 'cause you do nothing but show off.”
    “And you don't tell me all that stuff about your ewe chewb and fumbler at all or how I should make sure my computer is plugged in or something.”
    “Alright, alright. I do sometimes get on you for not knowing about the digital age, but who could blame me? It's the whole world against you.”
    “I do. And I firmly believe that there are other people out there just like me. Just waiting for the solar flare.”
    “You're living in the bronze age, Emi. Just try it, you might like it.”
    “Not until I can get you to read a book. A real one. Not Tweedlight or Lonesome Wendigo Boy. A classic like 1984 or Oliver Twist.”
    “You know all that stuff is boring.”
    “1984 is my favorite...”
    “Well, I'll see you at lunch.”
    “It's a good book! It changed my life!”

    Got a bit lazy at the second half but my whole point was to create a rather drab character anyways. She can't be too cool or likable from the start. She should be a fungus character. One who grows on you in spite of the fact that you didn't like her at the start.
     
  9. FuzzyBlueLights Traverse Town Homebody

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    @What?
    I agree with you on the music front. Classical music is what I enjoyed while reading VN's with Jayn. And they seemed to be most fitting no matter what the occasion. Though I do think rock is versatile enough to, not compete with, but be inserted into certain sections of the VN. When I think of music, I think of Pokemon or VN's where each character/area got their own song that fit them. I think we should implement that, musicwise.

    @Jayn
    I like our little Generated protagonist. If anything, we should keep her an OC and give/call her a proper forum name. Her age is alright, I was around that age when I joined, lol. I don't think her background matters much, in all honesty; her randomly generated life story seems good enough for our purposes which, is for forum fun. I just don't think we should care about the protagonist's background unless it really matters, like Jiku mentioned using the divorce for dramatic effect at one of her low points of the story. Which would be perfect, otherwise, it's fine to me. About her sexuality, I don't mind it at all. Makes her more unique. How many of use have EVER read anything with a lesbian protagonist? Plus, how neat would this VN be with a female lesbian saving a forum from crashing and burning while taking a little break with her currency to play some kind of "Name the Lyrics" game or whatever in the KHV-Chorus section?

    I love the idea of seperating the VN from the other version of the Musical, because why would I waste my space downloading a VN where I just click through it in under 15 minutes or so? I can just watch the Let's Play. If people are willing to put in the time and effort to make the VN even better then it would be without the extra fun and content, then I am all for it. Plus I cannot be the only one who'd think it'd be a little pointless in a linear VN which just something simple like a..'Save' and 'Resume Chapter' feature. That would be great, but a waste of the creativity us members could provide.

    I will type up and respond more later. This sleepyness is really getting to me at the moment.
    PS: Sorry for any errors.
     
  10. Jayn

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    So, the 25th is the start date for voting. Let me finalize some things here and also note that I've been in terrible spirits lately and don't feel like sugar coating anything at this point. Please don't take anything personally.

    I like your little run through there with the dialogue. My question is how the current OC takes away from the drabness? What makes her likable? Because she's not straight? Or do you just mean she should be an average, completely stereotypical bland character? In which case, doesn't that contradict this here:


    I'm not exactly sure how a 15 year old lesbian protagonist is stereotypical. I do, however, agree that a divorce is pretty cliche, but it's also something relatable and something that happens. It's simple and effective.

    Everyone else seems fine with the girl as she is? I started to explore my sexual preference at age eleven. Was I sure? Definitely not. But I had my first girl crush around the time, though I didn't understand much about what I was feeling. There is no set age for that, everyone is different and age fifteen is not that unbelievable. However, if it's too much for you guys to handle, we can just make her straight with normal straight girl problems and she can just have a crush on a guy. That's less because of what you've said and more so that everyone is generally comfortable, as annoying as it is for me to accept that sexuality matters in that way.

    Try not to take this the wrong way, I like your ideas, but I also wish you had spent this time developing your plot fully, because then you could have everything that you'd like the way you liked it. I've felt awkward because you're the only one out of all who have tried to help showing strong opposition to certain things, but you're also someone who's plot was chosen so I'm not sure why you wouldn't just do things the way you'd like there. I appreciate your help and discussion, genuinely, but I am curious as to why you didn't try to develop yours more, too.

    You can still have a kinetic novel with non-linear elements, and for the structure of the actual VN, anything presented here initially has no issues. Plums, What? and I will be handling the mechanics and VN building so nothing that was suggested is something that cannot be done or is too difficult.

    I also wanted to get a feel for music because it's inevitable that I will have a large role in leading that, and the more that's planned now, the better and the less time is wasted in the future. Music generally comes before the lyrics.

    Anyway. Change/Compromise.


    • 15 year old straight, nerdy female named Aliya Crews.
      Divorce news happens towards the end.
    • Name the Song game. Name the lyrics would be more difficult.


    MINI-GAMES


    Name the Song - KHV Chorus
    Excerpts from songs are played (or lyrics come up on the screen). Multiple choice menu comes up. Guess what song. Correct answers get get you points to go towards your prem points.

    KHV Trivia - Community Center Event
    Same premise. If you talk to people, they'll tell you certain facts and stuff about KHV. When you play, some of the things will be asked. Amaury and Misty can tell you facts throughout the game, whereas other's may just say something in conversation. Can be developed more.

    EXTRAS

    Upon talking to Plums (Mixtape Mania) at a certain point in the game, depending on your actions, you can unlock a radio. (The radio button will then appear on the main menu afterwards). The radio is just a typical game jukebox thing. You can open it up from the main menu and listen to music from the game. Talking to Jayn at a specific point can unlock KHV Chorus songs. Talking to Sabby at a specific point can unlock Podcasts.
    Depending on actions, you can unlock maybe a bonus ending that hints at a sequel or another act? This is what is meant by staying linear and adding non-linear elements. Something simple.

    PREM POINTS
    1000 points gets you a 'premium' account. You get points for doing certain things and taking to certain people. ^ 1000 points unlocks extras like the games and things mentioned above.

    Locking because I am satisfied with this for the poll.
     
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