Bitter as poison biting deep Every moment awake Every moment asleep Every thought in my mind Every word that I speak What is this feeling Thats left me so weak? The mask that I wear Shows a smile But what I really feel Is hidden deep As deep as eternity Never showing how I truly feel Trapped by an image that you created Losing myself behind this mask Losing sight of who I was Who I was then Who I am now But who am I now? I no longer have the answers And I am taken over by this feeling Bitter sweet its sharp enough to hurt And it cuts like a blade across my thoughts Bound by what you expect of me Trapped by all your jealousy I forget what it was like To be truly free
Creative and well written, much thought put into this from what I can see. I spot only one spelling mistake, but the mood protrayed by the use of words make up for it in the readers mind.
Thank you very much ^^ :) Thanks ^^ erm where is my spelling mistake though? I can't find it and would like to correct it xDDD
The word "moment" in the second line. The n is in the wrong place. By the way, if you have more writting, show it off, I'd be happy to read them.
I see it now xD thanks ^^ oh and I have about 6 other poems in this section if you want to read them :) Thank you guys for all the uber nice comments :) *glomps*
*Has fallen in love with this flow* And I just love how it looks like his .... .......... ................ ........... .... ...... .......... ................ ........... .... ^^ And you did a wonderful job of portraying the emotions in this poem <3
