A few of my poems

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  1. Axel Chaser

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    This one isn't as good as the others. I can see potential if it were longer but there its too vague and small. Otherwise it would be good:)
     
  2. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Thank Axe...I came up with this late last night so yeah i was just too tied ha ha
     
  3. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Light of love (A Valentine poem)

    Love is like the light within darkness
    Shining brightly, blinding those who see it
    As they find the one they love

    Even though the light is sometime hard to find
    It is always there, waiting to be found
    When it is, it fills the heart with love and joy

    When you now have the love
    Remember the one way to truly show your love
    By saying three little words
    I love you
     
  4. Mr. Van Whippy ♥ Biscuits and cookies

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    :D You wrote this? I think it's pretty cool. It has a kingdom hearts style. Light and dark, love. Like it.
     
  5. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Thanks, we was making valentine cards on computer at college and the lady we have knows I write poems, so she turned around and said, write a love poems please, so I did. Also it shouldn't have anything to do with kingdom hearts since I don't like writing fan poems
     
  6. Flowers-For-You Traverse Town Homebody

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    It's cute ^_^
    I've written some love poems but... I've never really shown them to anybody since they're kind of sad.
     
  7. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Well it's been awhile since I had a good cry (omg it's true and I use to be a bit of a cry baby) so could I read them?
     
  8. Ratchet Bah weep graaagnah wheep ni ni bong!

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    That was a lovely poem. The last lines said it all for me. The feelings are what matter.
     
  9. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    They sure do sis, I even put this in the card I made cus I liked it so much
     
  10. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Yeah I kinda force this one out of me...I'll try and re-write it sometime
     
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    ZOmg, one of your best ones till now. The ending is real nice. Good job!
     
  12. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    My snowy memory

    I do not remember him all that well
    But that day walking me home in the snow
    Is one of few memories I have of him
    I recall looking up at my father
    His black hair with snow hanging on
    This is my snowy memory of him
    One I’ll never forget
    For the snow will always remind me
    Of that snowy day with my father



    It was snowing again today and this is what snow makes me think of, one of my dearist memories
     
  13. Ratchet Bah weep graaagnah wheep ni ni bong!

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    That made me cry. I was thinking of my dad. It was wonderful.
     
  14. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    thanks, hope you like the other one I just posted
     
  15. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Aww I didn't mean to make anyone cry, anyways this memory means a lot to me because I only have three of my dad and this is the only one of us alone, also i haven't seen my dad since I was 7 and I'm 18 now
     
  16. Ratchet Bah weep graaagnah wheep ni ni bong!

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    No, you didn't know so don't be sad on my account. My dad died from leukemia.
     
  17. AlexleHoshi Dude called Alex

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    Well I hope you have more memories of him then i did of mine, my dad is still alive I think
     
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    As good as the love one! Though verse 5 flows a little less well it's good. You get better and better! One day you should try to write a longer one.
     
  19. ...::/final_falling\::... King's Apprentice

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    my dad has cancer,i hate it its shrinking but lately hes been yelling at my mom:( im so sorry about both your dads *cries*
     
  20. Ratchet Bah weep graaagnah wheep ni ni bong!

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    If you need someone to talk to sora59 or anniexo, I'm here. It's really tough, but hang in there. *hugs*
     
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