A Love Poem

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  1. Roxas OG

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    Before Reading

    I'm in love with someone. I truly believe love exists. But the person I'm in love with... their friend likes me. And she's always complimenting me and hugging me and touching me and everything in front of her friend, and I hate it. So I wrote this poem to let out my feelings on the matter.

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    Seven shots of a brandy wine.
    Two dozen beers on the wall.
    Is happiness just a waste of time?
    You’re coming for me one and all.

    How do I come and make myself clear?
    It’s like finding sugar in sand.
    Two beings hurt are what I fear.
    But I need to say where I stand.

    I hate it when you convince me.
    Those compliments are a piece of crap.
    To tell me I have perfect quality.
    This is more than a silly rap.

    Stroke the fire with your eyes.
    Pry at me with no regret.
    And when I look to the skies.
    I’m placing my thoughts on a simple bet.

    But what about the other one?
    Who sits next to you.
    Her beauty shines like the sun.
    There’s nothing you can do.

    So get off my back.
    We can still be friends.
    But she’s the one I love.
    Forever and the end.

    There’s nothing you can do.
    Her beauty shines like the sun.
    Who sits next to you?
    But what about the other one.

    I’m placing my thoughts on a simple bet.
    And when I look to the skies.
    Pry at me with no regret.
    Stroke the fire with your eyes.

    This is more than a silly rap.
    To tell me I have perfect quality.
    Those compliments are a piece of crap.
    I hate it when you convince me.

    But I need to say where I stand.
    Two beings hurt are what I fear.
    It’s like finding sugar in sand.
    How do I come and make myself clear?

    You’re coming for me one and all.
    Is happiness just a waste of time?
    Two dozen beers on the wall.
    Seven shots of a brandy wine…

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    If you didn't notice, after the verse where the last line is Forever and the end, the poem starts itself in reverse. Why?

    The first half up to 'Forever and the end' is my feelings about what is going on.

    Now read it from 'forever and the end.'

    This is me coming to the conclusion that I can't just listen to this girl's prancing and whining... I need to stay there for the one I love. Because I love her. So the first half - me thinking about everything that's going on with these two girls, and the second half (the first half backwards) is me finally coming to the conclusion that I need to stand by the one I love.

    I hope you enjoyed this poem.
     
  2. Misty gimme kiss

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    Wow, Roxas, you're a good writer. You're in a band, right? You should make it a song.:)
     
  3. Roxas OG

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    Thanks, I worked hard on it.
     
  4. Akio Traverse Town Homebody

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    Great job. I'd like if I were the mushy type. :D

    BTW, I spaced out and forgot what I was doing. This will explain the title thing. XD
     
  5. Hissora ahurhurhur.

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    thats really good-Very meaning full
    You should write more
     
  6. i love axel ^^ Traverse Town Homebody

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    that was deep man deep
    you should write more
     
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    CtR says NO to NECRO BUMPING LIKE THIS!


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