"Girl Behind Closed Door" Another song by me

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  1. axel-chanviii Twilight Town Denizen

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    Usually I'd dedicate this to Joey, but Joey doesn't talk to me anymore so its not for him.And I dunno why I'm posting this...oh well.:stupid: OMG he doesn't know I'm alive. (I found him on MySpace and told him I was dead.)

    verse one:
    Do you see her standing there,
    She's on the edge of a nervous breakdown,
    One hit and she wants to shut down,
    Entirely,
    But as you know
    I'm still here,
    Wishing I was her,
    At least she gets to be with you,
    I don't think.

    Chorus:
    Could I deal with the pain,
    And the hearts you've slain,
    All the memories as I,
    Close my eyes,
    I have a scar that won't heal,
    I'm just a girl behind closed doors.

    verse two:
    She stumbles in the dark,
    You reach out and hold her,
    Close to you,
    You don't see,
    That I'm watching you again,
    My fists clench in anger.

    Repeat chorus

    verse three
    People saying let go,
    What do they know,
    Too full in their heads,
    I love you,
    Always will,
    You're the one who can make my scar heal,
    Heartbreaker,
    Kiss her I fall down,
    Can't see me when she's around,
    Oh oh,
    Oh oh.

    Repeat chorus twice.
     
  2. Jiku Neon Kingdom Keeper

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    You know what would be nice? A melody at the very least. I'm fine with written music but without the music it's really hard to get any impression of the song at all.
     
  3. Forever Love Life Without Limits

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    Cute. :) I don't think I could write a song if my life depended on it. Good job. I liked it.

    I agree. If you know how to play the guitar or piano or something, you should post a video link so we could actually hear it. That'd be awesome.
     
  4. Tora-chan Traverse Town Homebody

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    Oh I really like this one. I keep on reading it lol. *claps*
     
  5. axel-chanviii Twilight Town Denizen

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    Too bad that my voice and guitar playing skills suck then isn't it? Lol, I'll try to come up with someting on my keyboard thats easier to do... :D
    Really? Wow, thats great! lol. No seriously I mean it thnx!
     
  6. Tora-chan Traverse Town Homebody

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    ^^ no problem. I'm sure you'll come up with something cool on the keyboard too.
     
  7. Chevalier Crystal Princess

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    you know, to demostrate a song, you donrt need to sing good

    just keep the melody.

    though this is nice.

    even, when, its acapella, though , if i try to write something, ill try using the piano, even though, inm not very good at it.
     
  8. ♦Demon♥Angel♦ Gummi Ship Junkie

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    EEP. THAT REALLY GOOD! -favs ya-