Kingdom hearts/Jurassic park

Sora and Donald had shocked looks while Larxene explained,Sora leaned down to Donald and whispered."Do they breath?she didnt even take one second to inhale''he said
"I know..let's dump water on her later for fun''Donald said,the only thing he had on his mind right now was pranks.
Sora laughed silently."Ok,im in''

 

Mickey ran through the Museum door and was out of breath

 

"i heard that!"larxene said "obviously you do not have a full memory of castle oblivion a msall amount of water for example rain drops will make me melt large amounts of water say a bucket of water will make me explode causing alot of death's and it is not in my best interest to kill"larxene said


aelita burst into the room "erm is this a bad time? anyway just so you know raptors are attacking"aelita said as the raptors entered

 

A T-rex burst through the wall and chased Mickey

 

aelita heard a big bang "sounds like a T-rex as well look you have strength in numbers i can stun T-rex's i'll go you stay and fight the raptors"aelita said running off and saw a guy with giant ears aelita summone a ball of light and threw it at the T-rex stunning it "are you ok?"aelita asked the strange big eared person

 

OOC: Ok due to a massive amount of confusion, King Mickey has been unoncious throughout most of the time.

However, it now stands that The King woke up before Goofy, and ran off in search of clues, as he usually does. He has now finally joined back with the group so now the story line makes sense.

Also, Larxene should head to the DNA lab after Demyx went in, so coannically, she did stay behind and speak with Sora, but she should head to the DNA Lab soon enough.


Goofy suddenly wakes up at the loud roar of a T-Rex.

He crashes down from where he was sitting, face first to the ground, but quickly scrambles up, sheild in hand.


Luxord eyes Larxene, apparently she had no clue who she was still talking to.

Luxord knows they must work with the Key Blade weilders to survive, but they were still against each other all the same.

He walks over to Larxene and whispers into her ear, "Speak little and lie as much as possible, you forget who they are...Also, Go check on Demyx in the Science Lab, I think I heard a dull crash in there..."

Luxord then paces away to the Museum Replica section to confront the two raptors.


Goofy Clumsily follows Luxord.

OOC: Ok, Naminestwinsister, I have a suggestion to make.

You continusley make run-on sentences that only make sense when the person knows what your meaning to say.

This is a minor mistake, but still needs to be fixed a bit.

Everybody has typing flaws, such as I will usually capitalize words that shouldn't be cap'd and there are times when I misspell words as well.

So it's nothing big, it might make it easier for people to read your posts is all.

Ex: In your own RP with a crossover with Ben 10 you wrote:

What are you waiting for Ben Hero up already.

A fix up to that would be:

What are you waiting for Ben?! Hero up already!

Just a few puncuations and commas and the problems fixed.

 

OOC: her spelling errors make me want to kill myself

"hey guys oh my god a raptor she runs''

"...What was that noise?''Sora asked Donald,who had stayed behind
"You dont want to know Sora!"Donald said,shaking fearfully again.
"Why not?...nevermind,Goofy know's where hes going..I hope..let's follow him!"Sora said,running after Goofy.
"Wait for me!"Donald said,quickly running after Sora.

 

ooc-ah well you see i don't quite understand punctuation fully i'm only 13 but i'll try


"What?! Demyx went in alone i'll be surprised if this whole place doesn't suddenly collapse"Larxene said and went into the DNA lab "Ok Demyx what have you done this time?"Larxene asked

ooc-is that a bit better

 

OOC: a bit better...use commas though.

 

OOC: True, better but commas will finish it off well. Nice improvement.

Luxord eyes one of the Raptors furiously, he stands beside Goofy With a hand of cards in hand.

He starts a counter for each person, the clocks on a team counter so that even if Goofy should lose all time, he'd still be brought back if Luxord won.

He then hears footsteps behind him and adds two more counters to His team, one for Sora and Donald.

He looks down at Sora, "Make your decision now, call, or fold..." Luxord offers to Sora, Donald and Goofy.

Luxord could probably take thse creatures on his own anyway.


Goofy then juts in front of Luxord with His shield and looks at him.

"I'm Callin'!" Goofy exclaims happily, putting up one thumbs-up at Luxord.


Surprised at the flash of light, Demyx whirls around nervously to face Larxene.

"I'm not doing anything!" Demyx admits, sweat pouring down his face.

He tries to cover the console and tank futilely with his arms.

Though managing to cover up the small creature for a short matter of time.
OOC: that question goes for Sora and Donald as well.

 

"Fold!"Donald quickly said,covering his eyes.
"Dinosaurs!?''Sora exclaimed,looking around at the primitive beasts.He didnt know how he just woke up 5 minutes ago to be faced with raptors,but he'd have to try and beat them."Im with Goofy,Call!Come on Donald!"Sora said,pulling his right arm back and summoning the Kingdom Key to his right hand on a flash of light.
Donald reluctantly pulled his hands away from his eyes and took out his staff,but still looked very scared.

OOC: oh and 13 has nothing to do with it...I was doing puntuation in 2nd grade...

and whoa wait a second Bama,didnt you say Luxord died since his arm flew to someone?

 

ooc-well you haven't been to my school we started punctuation last year plus we have two english teachers that teach us totally dfferent things which conuses us and slows us down we were about to do comma's when our exams came up plus the spare two weeks the dumb head of KS3 made us spend them as year 8's with different teachers who thought we'd learnt about punctuation


bic- "What are you trying to hide Demyx?"Larxene asks stepping closer

 

OOC: No wait, It was Xigbar who died and his arm flew out of the trees, dismembered, and landed at Luxord's feet.

Luxord is the one who wants to die, because it could have easily had been him to have been eaten instead of Xigbar, but he's not dead. Hence the reason he's so cold with Larxene and Demyx, and the rest.

BIC:
Luxord offically starts the timer and throws out a full hand of Cards, sending them hurling at the two raptors.

This decreases each's time by a third, a weak attack but still doing its work.

He then hides under a single smaller card in a set of fifty he throws to the ground and shifts around.

Goofy performs a Goofy Tornado, tossing one Raptor into the air and furthe decreasing its time by another third.

EDIT:
Demyx covers the creauture's tank more directly, smiling at Larnene.

"Nothing!" he retorts quickly.

Suddenly the creature behind him makes a small moan and appears from behind the glass tank Demyx's leg is covering.


OOC: here's a guidline:

Raptor one: about close to half of its time left.
Raptor two: Only a third taken awya from its time.
Weak attacks, a tenth of time
Strong attack, a third of time
a combo finisher, half of time

 

"Donald,we've got the last one!"Sora said,grabbing his keyblade with two hands and taking the Raptor Goofy left alone."Freeze!"he shouts,firing constant blasts of Blizzaga.
Donald cover's his eyes and hits the raptor with his Blizzard spells as well,soon freezing the cold-blooded creature

 

"Demyx, what is that thing?"Larxene askspointing at the strange creature

 

Luxord shfits his card under the raptor and knocks a finishing blow from below, killing the last one.

From this angle, back in his human form, Luxord sees the Frozen Raptor encased in ice.

For some odd reason, he almost thought he saw one of its eyes twitch, but it was most likely only an illusion.

He looks to Sora, and nods, almost smiling friendlishly. "Good work..." Luxord comments curtly.


Goofy whirls around dizlly, still fatigued by his spin attack.

He then shakes his head and rights himself.

"So how come your pals are so Happy-Go-Lucky, and you ain't?" Goofy asks inquisently.


Luxord just walks off at Goofy's question, heading back down the stairs before the others, without a word.


Demyx sweats somemore and swings himself against the glass to sidestep to the left, hiding the creature again.

"What are you talking about? You must be crazy or something Larxene..." Demyx suggests.

 

"..Keep an eye on him guys..on all of them'Sora whispered when Luxord was out of sight.He put his keyblade over his opposite shoulder and ran to catch up to him.
"..Let's go Goofy!"Donald said,following Sora with his staff still out.

 

"Look demyx, I don't know what you're problem is but you know as well as I do that i can't exactly do anything to you, you know my weakness now don't you?"Larxene said "And don't answer that, it was a rhetorical question"Larxene added


ooc-er i had a go at using commas are they all in the right places or are they just wrong

 

Demyx, in his worries, was actually about to do just that and answer the question.

Then he hears glass break on the other side and wheels about to face the other side of the tank.

A broken hole is right on the other side and no sign of his creation is in sight.

Now I know how Vexen feels when his experiments go wrong... Demyx thinks to himself.


Goofy, hearing his name, follows Donald and Sora down the staircase and calmly sits down in a broekn chair that's near where Kairi is sleeping.

 

Sora sits down next to Goofy,as doesDonald."So we're stuck here then?..and this world is full of dinosaurs?''he asks Donald.
Donald nods.

OOC: twin your using Kairi arent you?..