Kingdom Hearts Time and Space

It is supposed to be panicked.

 

Your story is good everyone is liking it. I enjoy listening to the music you suggested while I was reading, how quick your adding new chapters, and finally your chapters are not that long so I don't have to much to read.

 

Doh >< Thanks.

Fix'd. thanks.

Never knew what it was for o.o Thanks for the info XD

*Goes to find more music* :P
Thanks Bro, Also if it was too long; Just tell me XD I'll work on that.

Thanks for the crit and Spell check guys.
Edit: Can't get that Spell Check thing >< I can't download anything right now.


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The next chapter. You jerks better have Youtube up >: Get ready for a long read >3 But this is Another failed attempt this time at a epic battle 8D

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Chapter 5: Roxas vs Sephiroth!
Scatter Oblivion...

(Play "End of the World" Theme here. If it ends early then play it again :P)
During some time before the battle...Before Roxas went to face "Sephiroth", he had a serious discussion about him with Axel and Xion. "Don't fight him Roxas! Don't help Cloud! Sephiroth is so strong the organization can't interfere with him!" Axel told Roxas as Xion had a grip on Roxas' hand. "Roxas don't go!" She begged. "Guys, Cloud is "Sora's" friend. If I don't help him he might think the Organization did it and then I won't get my chance to talk with him. Besides, I wanna see what he's made of." Roxas explained "C-Come on lover boy!" , "As much as I wanna get you back for that Axel; No." They said each other as Roxas began moving but Xion grabbed the back of his cloak. "Promise us...Promise us you'll come back alive!" Xion begged. Roxas paused for a minute and looked back. "You know I can't promise that." Roxas added "Why not?" Axel asked incredibly angered. "We are talking about Sephiroth aren't we?" Roxas said as he made Xion let go and he left. "You best live you fool." Axel thought.

(One Winged Advent Style again! 8D)
Roxas dashed down making a shockwave in the ground with Oathkeeper as Cloud flew over into a corner as Sephiroth jumped in the air. "Stop dodging! I wanna face you and kill you!" Roxas demanded as he flew up towards Sephiroth and backflipped as their weapons clashed "I have no Interest for vermin like you." , "Then GET interested!" They once again smashed their weapons into each other as Sephiroth applied enough force to blow Roxas down. Roxas got up with his eye bruised badly already. "S-So....Y-You are that terrifying..." He commented as he charged at Sephiroth. He pulled out three cards as they disappeared. "Ars Arcanum!" Roxas yelled as he slashing Sephiroth in a speedy combo but was stopped in the middle from Sephiroth teleporting. "Trash. Get out of the way!" Sephiroth said teleport slashing him in the back and doing it slowy and painfully as blood actually flew from Roxas' back. How could a nobody have blood? No, It was Sephiroth's sheer force defying the laws of physics. Roxas yelled out in horrible pain as he tried to regain balance. Sephiroth performed his Aerial Omnislash and slashed him into the ground. Blood dripped from Roxas' mouth as he stood up "It's about time I got a good challenge other than Sora and Axel!" He declared rushing at Sephiroth. Sephiroth knocked out Oathkeeper from his hand but Roxas used Sora's "Trinity" Attack with Oblivion slamming him into the ground. Sephiroth teleported and floated into the air. "Descend, Heartless Angel..." He chanted as his hand reached out towards Roxas. He was almost close to crushing his hand but Roxas stole his Masamune. "Don't Mind me! I'll only use this to kill you!" Roxas mocked using Sephiroth's Dark Aerial Omnislash on him. Blood was coming from Sephiroth's chest. "You disappoint me, Yet you're stronger than Cloud." He commented as he teleported taking his Masamune back. They both hovered in the air looking at each other angerily as they charged again.

(Play The World That Never Was Theme here. Calm one.)
Axel and Xion were running through the castle trying to find someone. "Where is everyone?" Axel asked looking around. "Research. Why?" Vexen stated as him and Zexion appeared "Vexen! Zexion! We need your help!" Xion started. "Calm down child. What is it?" Vexen tried to calm Xion down "Roxas is fighting Sephiroth!" Axel said Zexion dropped the book he was reading. "S-S-S-Sephiroth? Roxas can't be that crazy." Zexion said doubting himself. "Roxas took on his real self and left the Organization once. You're saying he's NOT crazy?" Axel replied as Vexen put his arm in front of Zexion "Enough, We shall research this respectively. I might get some data to make the perfect replica of Sephiroth!" Vexen told them as he started laughing. Zexion disappeared to alert the other members the other three disappearance to the Twilight Realm. Zexion appeared in the pillar chair room. "Superior. Roxas is engauging combat with Sephiroth." , "Sephiroth?" Xemnas stood up and Xigbar actually started laughing. "Ha! I can't believe he'd do something so incredibly stupid!" He insulted standing up. "At least he's having fun." Larxene began to envy as they all Disappeared.

(Play Re:Com's "The Fight for my Friends!" Ost At "I will make you Perish".)
"Quit trying. You can't compare to me." , "Really? I'm not the one bleeding in the chest." They were holding the other Weapon(s) back as they flew back. "I will make you perish if needed." He declared as a Dark aura surrounded him. "Two can play at that!" Roxas said as his body glowed with the outline of golden. "Give up and you might live longer." Sephiroth taunted as he took his stance and Roxas took his. Sephiroth left a afterimage as he slashed Roxas into the air. Cloud was watching as he saw them bashing at each other similar to how him and Sephiroth did at the Colissum. Roxas slashed Sephiroth flipping forward as he did it. Sephiroth blocked and did summoned Firaga Wall to burn Roxas as he fell to the ground but was quickly slashed back up and Sephiroth performed almost a ever lasting Omnislash ending a 54-hit combo with a stab into the wall as he used Sin Harvest. The Dark orbs each hit Roxas as he had Scars everywhere. "Is that it?...." Roxas asked in utter pain getting up and holding Oblivion. "Dark Aura!" He said remembering a sealed memory from a Fight between Riku and Sora. He teleported and sliced past Sephiroth repeatedly as he ended by stabbing the sword into the ground "Vanish!" He finished as beams of light shot up hitting Sephiroth. He stood up again as blood was dripping from his arms. "Let us end this." He commanded as they ran next to each other and slashed.....

(XII Discreation)
".....and That's why I needed you here." King Mickey's voice spoke as a hooded figure was there. "Why hide myself as the Organization?" He asked taking his hood off as Riku. "I'll explain later. Now you must get to the castle and Queen Minnie will explain more there. Understand?" Mickey replied giving him a key and a card. As Riku left. "Well, Looks like we're missing out on something new? Right Sora?" He thought as he walked to the end of the Dark Depths. Sora appeared in the place he landed in Hollow Bastion less than a year ago. "I gotta find Donald and Goofy, Then the king." Sora said to himself as he began running through town.

(Rage Awakened)
The man had defeated most of the creatures he destoryed as he came across the Unbirth Wheel Master. "Who excatly are you?" He asked him as he crushed his helmet. "I am Terra! One of the three knights!" Terra replied as he charged at the Unbirth.

To be continued as a knight.....

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8D I did good right? No harshies >.<

Also the next chapter will have to wait. My leg is in horrible pain.

 

Awesomecakes! I love the blood, the action, the dialogue, the VEXEN!

I'm complete opposite of some people in that I rather prefer long, detailed chapters so I can better picture things in my head without visual reference.

I'm voting for Sephiroth to win, as he is the name of my friend. Haha. Every time he is mentioned I see my friend fighting with Roxas or the Cloud person and I'm like this is so cool! GO SILVER (my nickname for him)!

I hope Larxene or Zexion gets a battle in somewhere. I'd love to see Zexion versus Vexen or something.

 

Rofl. I'm not sure to make them longer or not XD I'll talk with Axel about it.

I still wanna know what his parents were thinking naming him Sephiroth! XD He's name after a FF villian lol.

Larxene and Zexion, Gotta think of a fight for Zexion since I got one for Larxene soon :3

I just found out I need more research for future chapters. Plus I might take a nap :P So expect a chapter at 10:00 at the most. I'll try not to let you guys down XD

 

You guys suck beyond all belief. I'm not continuing the Fanfic D:
















Just kidding <3 I love all of you, In a Non-Gayish way lol.

Well as the famous quote goes.....

THIS. IS. SPARTA! Lol.
The chapter ish war themed. XD

Notes Added:
Personalities:
Terra: Cocky.
Ven: Almost similar to Roxas too :P
Aqua: Caring and similar to Xion.

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Chapter 6: The Rebirth of Terra?! The Three Knights of the Keys
The Unbirth Army - Part 1 - Escape and Comeback

(Play Vim and Vigor here.)
The legendary Enigmatic Soldier Terra proved to be a match for Wheel Master. Terra didn't back down as he kept slashing at him back and forth. "P-Please have mercy!" , "Never!" Terra sliced right through him and ran forward as a giant implosion occured from Wheel Master's Death. Terra ran on the edge of a cliff and saw a army of unbirths coming in Terra's direction as he noticed Master Xehanort on another cliff. "Hello Terra! I have been waiting for you." , "I see you got your army to back you up old man!" Terra re-summoned his keyblade. "Do you honestly think I'm here to fight you now?" He mocked and started laughing "Oh nooooo! I'm here to fight your little kiddies. Right?" He mocked right back like a child as Xehanort stopped laughing. He disappeared without another word as Terra saw the unbirths beginning to destroy the wall. "H-Hey old man!" Terra yelled as he began to lose his balance but stabbed his keyblade into the side of the cliff as the rest of it fell; Destroying the unbirths under. "Wow, That took out like 40. Now for ten million more." He said with a sarcastic scent in his voice. He jumped down with his Keyblade.

(Sinister Shadows here.) - (When he jumps through the portal play Hollow bastion, KH1 Style recommened.)
Terra smashed down making an explosion near him taking out about only ten as the rest jumped back. Terra backflipped as his hand glowed with lightning. "Terra volt!" He commanded as a large sphere of Energy flew out from his keyblade and destroyed hundreds as it massacred a side of the army. "I can't win like this! I need help! ....Help...That's it! Old man's project!" Terra remembered as he Sonic Bladed through the army but went completely straight as he eventually tore open a portal similar to the one in Disney Castle leading to the area as he jumped in. Terra appeared in front of the door into Ansem's study. "Helloooo! Anyone home?" He called out knocking on the door. He noticed a mouse open the door. "M-Mickey?" , "That's King Mickey to you!" Terra picked up Mickey. "I haven't seen you in ages! How are you?" Terra said in happiness as he put down Mickey. "Terra, Right now is a bad time to talk about that." , "Your telling me. I got Unbirths to kill. LOTS of 'em. Where's oldie's project?" , "Downstairs." They both ran down but Leon saw them as they past the computer. "N-No way....Terra?" He said to himself as he looked in the way they ran. "So, What do you need?" , "My friends back. I know they aren't dead...I hope. You said this thing was also a teleporter right?" He said holding two keyblades up. "Yep. Bring your friends back Terra." Mickey stood back as a keyhole appeared.

(Sanctuary. You heard me! The Opening theme for KH2 >3)
Terra summoned all three keyblades and unlocked the keyhole as a giant door similar to Kingdom Hearts appeared and opened. "....Terra....?" Two voices were heard through the wind as two people appeared. One looked almost too similar to Roxas as he came out from the door. A girl with Blue hair also came out. "....Aqua? ....Ven?" Terra said breaking into tears as he hugged both of them. "Relax Terra! We're back! Don't cry." Ven stated as he was the one who looked like Roxas. "Jeez. I think he became more of a baby." Aqua teased as they all started laughing. "Well we have bigger fish to fry. Unbirths LOTS of 'em." Terra stated to them as he opened a portal. "There's a whole army in there, Think you two can handle them?" He asked as they both got the other two keyblades. "Terra, That's like asking if we know you." Ven replied as they all jumped in.

(Rage Awakened)
They all appeared and when they landed. All three swept up many of them with a triple slash. Terra's Keyblade glew with the other two as Ven performed "Zero Graviga" pulling most of the unbirths in the air and whirling them around. Aqua froze them by throwing her keyblade and using "Blizzard Raid" freezing them in the air. Terra summoned a giant Triangle like shape on the ground and he slammed his Keyblade in it making a large explosion taking out every Unbirth. "You are all too slow." Master Xehanort taunted as him and his Apprentice appeared. "Now what shall you do? More will come and these new enemies will come for you." Master Xehanort mocked as he began laughing. "New enemies?" Aqua asked as Terra ignored the question and stood tall and laughed back "We'll take down anyone in the way just to stop your "Kingdom Hearts" Old man." Terra finished as they stared up at him and he simply looked down as he was superior.



To be continued....as the first attempt?

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Would've been longer if I didn't get Writer's block half way through it. I think the pictures fit a bit.

Cnc? No harshies XD
Plus I KNOW I screwed up somewhere, I just can't find it ;_;

Added note: BBS HISTORY 101 <3:
The first Kingdom Hearts Attempt I'm gonna guess was baldy here, Which OF COURSE is/has failed. He's trying again D:
Extra Note: Right now it's still the "Slashed" Climax of Roxas vs Sephiroth, Don't mention the fact that I didn't include them in the chapter :P

 

Ok, since you've requested no 'harsh comments', i'm going to table a majority of my comments.

You have to work on structure. In the first two chapters, you are stringing everything together. As a reader, I don't want to have everything mashed upon into one or two paragraphs and have that constitute a chapter.
Example:

I like that you are using bold font to distinguish between what is actually dialogue and action, but I would suggest, that you do the following: Do not bold font, instead, seperate dialogue to add flow and pace instead of fast and blocky. Also, details are key.

Now you will notice that by stucturing this segment in this way, it makes the reader grasp the story a bit better, all though this section moves EXTREMELY fast. Sloooow it down. Give us a glimpse into the backstory, encorperate your theories into fiction and tell it how you see it. Bascially, give us a reason to care. I'm not saying that this is bad, its just readers like details and not having the feeling that they are in a hurry to get somewhere.

Hope this helps.

 

I was actually hoping to avoid that method >< But thanks, I'll still bold the text because It was a tactic I learned and trying to stick with.

So like "My" Reviews on my fanfic? A reason to care....never really thought of that DX

Thanks for the advice, I'll apply in my next chapter.

 

If you decide to stick with the bold font, that is entirely up to you because you are the writer and obviously you have a style that you want to stick with and i support that.

The format you'll find is a generic norm on the forum, and it will possibly attract more readers, but again, we never know right?

Glad I could help.

 

I wouldn't be surpised if I got the same viewers again XD

Alright guys, I'm getting Lazy too lazy.
So today is a no chapter day. Tomorrow I'm trying at four chapters or more at the least for you guys.

Besides, I haven't wrote them down yet :>

 

Love the newest!

I kind of wish I knew the characters, though. I guess you have to assume we know the characters already, but I'm getting mixed up with the Clouds and Sephiroths and Terras and stuff. My problem though, nothing you did wrong. Most everyone knows who you're talking about. Haha.

Its still awesome! Keep it up, I really love the action in this story. Pure epic.

 

Actually Marluxia and Larxene wanted to took over themselves I think.

I also made a chapter anyway because I was bored :P

WORLD WAR 184!

Wait, Where's World War 3? D:
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Chapter 7: WAAAAAAR!
Unbirth Army - Part 2 - Dead Wave

(Sinister Shadows)
Terra flew up the cliff at blinding speed trying to slash both of them but they both simply dodged it and teleported. They both appeared above all of them as they all charged at each other allowing their keyblades to clash making an enormous shockwave but the "Eye" on Xehanort's Keyblade began glowing as unbirths appeared. The Apprentice slashed Ven and Aqua away from Terra as Xehanort slashed him. Blood dripped from Terra's arm "Lucky shot." He said unimpressed performing Sonic Blade but could only hit some of the unbirths. The Apprentice began clashing with Ven slamming their keyblades back and forth but Aqua threw her keyblade as a boomerang and Ven jumped. Her keyblade was covered in blue spinning and hitting the Apprentice in the face and back as she caught it. The Apprentice jumped into the air but Ven jumped behind him and Aqua jumped in front of him as all three started clanging their blades into the other. Ven and Aqua couldn't even break through his defenses as Unbirths clawed both of them in the back. Terra punched the ground grabbing a piece of earth and slammed it into the ground crushing the unbirths and it allowed him to jump higher to get Xehanort but couldn't see him. "What the?" He asked as a pillar of the ground pounded him in the gut as it fell into the sky. Master Xehanort's hand glowed as it summoned two familliar Giants.

(The Corrupted)
A giant Black monster made of rock was on the left side of Terra. The "Rock" Titan, The double headed monster Hercules defeated once ago. A giant monster of Ice appeared on the right side of Terra. The "Ice" Titan, Which Hercules also defeated. "Great. Baldy can summon two giants to kill us! What's next?" Terra complained as they both raised their fist up and slammed the pillar but Ven and Aqua caught Terra as he fell. "Thanks." , "No problem, but how are we suppose to win? My Zero Graviaga wouldn't have an effect on something that big." Ven told them as they landed. Rock Titan shot out shockwaves as he walked and Ice Titan made circles of Ice on the ground. They both killed hundreds of unbirths without noticing it. Terra jumped on Rock Titan's foot as if he was performing a Reaction command. "Solid Break" it was called as he slashed a piece of rock off only to get punched into the cliff as he fell down with blood flying with him. Ice titan grabbed Aqua as her keyblade fell into the ground and she screamed in pain. Ven grabbed her keyblade and his, They both got covered with flames. He used "Fire Blazer" to melt off Ice titan's hand and caught Aqua. "Thanks." , "No problem but this is getting harder." They spoke to each other but heard ice freezing as Ice titan grew another hand. They all got back to back. "How do we win?" Aqua asked them beginning to get worried. Terra didn't say a thing because he was completely out of ideas. "I got it." Ven said. "I need you two to give me a lift into the air." He ordered as they both threw him into the sky. "Final Break!" He shouted as his keyblade shined with a blinding light as a huge beam flew out and through the titans. They both fell down disappearing as hearts appeared and went up into the sky. "Great. He can summon Heartless." Terra said as all three of them saw the sky get covered with storm clouds.

(Final Fantasy VI Battle theme(The Black Mages) A favorite FF theme by all <3)
The Apprentice appeared and grabbed Ven by the neck and blood flew from his mouth splating on his helemet but he didn't care as he crashed Ven into a cliff and the rocks almost killed him as they all landed on him one by one. "Ve-" Terra was slashed heavily by Xehanort and Aqua got hit with Fire raid from The Apprentice's keyblade. She fell down with blood coming from her face and her keyblade flew over to Terra. He was being held by Xehanort as his neck was being crushed by his hand. "Argh.....Old man!" Terra said slowly being choked as he reached his hand out actually getting Xehanort's Keyblade! "W-What?" Xehanort spoke as Terra quickly slashed him and reached out to get Ven's and Aqua's Keyblade. He flew over to the Apprentice slashing him almost cutting his arm off as blood soared through the sky from both of them. Terra landed and threw Xehanort's keyblade back. "Very good Terra! But in order to defeat me, You must defeat your new enemy!" He said as him and his Apprentice disappered. Terra ran over to Aqua as she got up. "Ven!" They both yelled slashing the rocks from him as he laid there. Aqua turned him over and checked his pulse. "H-He's alive but barely." She informed Terra as he grabbed Ven. "We gotta get to the king!" Terra said opening a portal as they both jumped in and the rest of the unbirths disappeared.

(Roxas' Theme - NOT the Other Promise)

In the Twilight Realm....

Sephiroth and Roxas were still in the position they went past each other in. Blood exploded from Roxas as he fell on the ground with blood flowing. "Cloud. Witness what will happen to you if you don't give in." Sephiroth spoke to a terrified Cloud as he could only look at Roxas. "N-N-No....I-I-It wont happen!" He spoke almost too scared for words as Sephiroth disappeared as soon as Axel, Xion, and the others appeared. "...The boy was beaten badly. It's too bad we didn't get here sooner." Vexen pitied as Xion and Axel ran to Roxas. "He can't be dead. Can he?" Xion said with her voice breaking and Axel was looking at Roxas. "No....Don't die on me. Not again!" Axel said to Roxas' body. "He is very well alive." Saix spoke. "How can you be sure?" Zexion asked. "He didn't disappear did he?" Xaldin remarked. "R-Right, Nobodies like us disappear upon death." Zexion replied towards Xaldin's answer as Axel and Xemnas picked up Roxas. "We must bring him back." Xemnas ordered Axel as he just nodded wiping a tear off as they disappeared.

(Keep with Roxas' theme.)
Two people appeared in a void of complete black darkness. It was Ven and Roxas standing back to back looking the down. "Could I....Be dead?" They both remarked as they turned around but a light engulfed both of them before they could see each other's face.

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I actually cried a bit on the last two paragraphs ;_;
I decided not to go with Destined's Format because I'm used to this one, I'll just add more detail :P

Xehanort can summon Heartless because I need two epic bosses and I wasn't about to bring back Wheel Master or do some more BBS research at this point.

Also Destined I would use your format but honestly, I like mine a bit better and I'm use to it.

Cnc? No harshies of course.

 

I think I'm prepared to be shocked XD
we rule the world with fanfics!

 

I always wonder why I can't apply ANY of this into real life XD

SOON WE SHALL RULE TEH WORLDZ!

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Note: This Chapter will have the Best KH Plot Twist EVAR...

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Chapter 8: Riku's Movement
The Promise to Namine - The Scent

(Twilight Town Theme - Roxas - Calm)
"This is where we captured him." Riku stood outside of the Train Station with his Blindfold on. He decided if the Organization did come back, He would not allow himself to see them. He looked up in the direction of the sunset. "This place...Wa- no. Is so peaceful." He said taking his blindfold off for the moment. A ball hit his leg as he picked it up, A little girl ran to him. "Hey Mister! Wanna play with us?" She asked. "With a face like that? I wish I couldn't say no. But I'll have to refuse." He answered giving her to ball. "Be good!" Riku called out as the girl left. He sighed "Ah, Kids...I was like her once." Riku commented as he began walking through town. He walked into the Market street to see three teenagers sitting around eatting ice cream. "Hey, Isn't it about school time for you kids?" He asked them. "Nah, Today's a day off." Hayner replied as one of the teenagers. "Thanks for caring about our education mister...uh...What is your name?" Olette said as another one. "....Call me Riku." He introduced as Pence jumped down and handed him a ice cream. "Come on, Enjoy it with us!" Pence offered as Riku nodded to join them. "People this nice....I'm almost sad to have dragged them into the Digital Town." Riku thought eatting with them. Pence grabbed his forehead. "Brainfreeze!" He shouted as the other two laughed. "Try not eatting it so fa- Ah!" Hayner grabbed his forehead. Riku and Olette laughed at both of them.

(Keep Playing the same. Stop Music after Hayner's second sentence. Play again after he leaves.)
"Thanks for hanging out with us Riku." Hayner thanked. "But your dressed like some guy I saved." Riku gasped at Hayner's words. He quickly remembered Roxas. "I'm me!" Roxas' voice echoed through his head. "I-I have to go. I hope I can hang out with you guys again." Riku said leaving without anything else. Riku walked into the forest. "How did he see him? I wish I had asked him." He thought. He walked over towards the Mansion area. "That scent....No....NO!" He quickly blindfolded himself as he ran to the mansion.

(Riku's Theme after the first sentence.)
"It's good to see you. Riku." A cloaked man spoke in front of the gate. "You, Your....Lexaeus!" Riku confirmed as Lexaeus removed his hood. "You shouldn't be alive! How did you come back? HOW?" Riku demanded a answer as Lexaeus laughed. "Calm down, I'm not here to fight you yet." Lexaeus said as Riku stood there. "You didn't answer my question." Riku added. "Because I do not know the answer." Lexaeus finished as Riku backed up a bit. "Where is he? Where is Roxas?" Riku asked him. "Near Death in Bed." Lexaeus answered. "So you're killing your fellow members?" , "Silence. We did nothing of the sort." Lexaeus held up a letter. "I feel the fingerprints left on th-" Riku gasped and drew Way To Dawn. "Where'd you find that? Who wrote it?" Riku was shaking for a minute and Lexaeus simply laughed at him. "Yes, It is from....Ansem. Or DiZ if you will." Lexaeus told him as he charged and slashed him but he dodged. "Read it." He gave it to him and disappeared.

(Keeeep Playin')
"Riku. If you're reading this then I shall let you know. This is my last wish to you. As Ansem, Not DiZ. A certain project I worked on and finished from someone else will be activated. By now it should have and the Organization should be back. Three figures wielding keyblades have appeared to fight the original creator of this project. But there is another way to stop this. Riku, The Organization is not your current Enemy. Incidents will occur soon dealing with them. Get to Namine and protect her, She knows the rest. She is inside the mansion. Please, Carry out this wish." ~Signed Ansem, Past Ruler of Raident Garden.
Riku broke down in tears from reading this "DAMN YOU XEMNAS!" He roared running into the mansion.

(Namine's Theme.)
In a pure white room, Pencil drawing could be heard on sheets of paper as drawings were on the wall. "My pencil broke." She said as she got up but unexpectedly Riku opened the door. "Hello. Namine." Riku spoke in a calm voice. "You are? Wait, That hair color..." Namine walked up to him. "You two have the same smell." Riku said in a flashback. "Riku?" She asked as Riku showed her the letter. "I was told to protect you. I want to." He told her honestly as Namine drew a butterfly on the letter near "Protect" as she handed it back. "Thank you." Namine said as she went over to get her book. "....I promise." Riku added holding a false good luck charm from Castle Oblivion. "You made this. I swear to protect you on this." He said getting her hand and placing it there. "Can you explain to me what's going on?" He asked Namine as he sat down in the other chair. She giggled a bit in happiness. "Sure." She agreed sitting down.

(The Other Promise. That's right! Roxas' FM+ Theme! >3)
"....and now he's in recovery." She finished a long explamation as Riku got up. "I see. So she's back." Riku added as he headed for the door. "Lets go." Riku said as they both walked out.
"Haaaaaaaa............" A sound was heard only be Riku's ears. "What was that?" , "What was what?" Riku looked around and his head started aching. "Ahhh! Argh....Ah..." Riku moaned in pain holding his head on the ground as darkness began to engulf him. "Riku! Riku!" She cried out but Riku could no longer hear her as he appeared in the Stationary of Awakening. "The scent I smell. It's so familiar yet I forgot it..." He said standing there as another cloaked figure stood before him. He summoned Way to Dawn. "Who now? Zexion? Vexen?" He spoke as the figure laughed. "I'm not them. I could be still in the organization now." The figure replied. "Your scent! I can't remember it but I fought you in Castle Oblivion! WHO ARE YOU?" Riku shouted. "You should know me better than anyone." , "How?" , "Because....I'm...." Riku's eyes opened in pure shock as he unhooded himself.

....Riku.....

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*Cue the "HOLY F**KING CRAP TARDS ON A TUESDAY MORNING!" sayings*

Cnc? XD

 

Yay Riku! Cant wait to get your next pm'd message for chapter 9! Awesome cliffhanger!

The fanfic's amazing as usual *hi fives*
Yay us!

 

Lol. Thanks! <3 I like Cliffhangers for some reason lol.

*High Fives*
We rule! X3

Ah, a Riku fan? XD Thank you bro.

 

Cloud and Sephiroth were pre-entered characters from KH2. I'm thinking about Genesis though.

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TEH ULTIMATE BATTLEEEEEEEEEEEE......

I think I might kill myself of how much I love making this now :P

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Chapter 9: Riku vs Repliku!
Way To The Dawn vs Soul Eater
Jealousy

(Re:CoM Scent of Silence.)
Riku and Repliku stood staring at each other and Repliku laughed. "So, it's shocking to see me? My "Upgraded" self? I've been recopied. Not by that fool Vexen!" Repliku stated. "....You're the bigger fool." Riku simply replied. "Why. Why did you steal it?" Repliku asked creating a massive shockwave from his hand blowing Riku back. "Why did you promise? Why did you promise to protect her! It wasn't and isn't fair! It was the only true memory I wanted to have! NO ONE ELSE! Take it back! You can't promise to her!" Repliku ranted in anger as Riku got up from the shockwave. "I made the promise because I wanted to." He answered without feeling scared. ".....You must die then." Repliku spoke.

Haaaaa.......... He exhaled.

(Re:CoM The Force in you.)
Repliku summoned Soul eater as they clashed. "Why do you still wield that?" Riku asked as Repliku's body got cloaked with darkness. "Because I walk the path of hate. To become real or even better." He replied performing Dark Strike Raid on him and then quickly slashed him twice as blood shattered from Riku. Repliku spun around slashing Riku more as he Riku jumped with blood falling. He glowed purpleish and blueish as he teleported rapidly slashing past Repliku. "Vanish!" Riku finished slamming his blade into the ground shooting out beams of light from the ground. "That all you got?" He mocked as he dashed towards Repliku but got blasted by Dark Firaga. They both performed a Dark Strike Raid as they both grabbed the other keyblade and slashed each other grabbing their original keyblades. Riku slid over to the side of Repliku slashing his back as blood shot out. Riku jumped up and slashed him multiple times using "Dark Break" slashing him in the end into the wall. Repliku easily got up. "Tired?" He mocked as Riku had began to gasp for air. "My Soul Eater transformed differently. Not like your Twilighted Way To The Dawn." He added walking towards a gasping Riku as a light shot out from Riku.

(Riku or Namine Theme can be played. I picked Riku.)
Riku was falling from a limitless fall as Namine appeared as he was falling. "It was his promise huh? Guess I'm late." He accepted that his promise was stolen but Namine grabbed his hand as he stood near her. "No, This is your promise. Whether it's the same or not. Your promise belongs to you as his to him. Riku your Replica got stronger from advancing in age but you can win. Remember your path." Namine's voice disappeared. "The path I chose....Light nor Darkness. I picked The Way To Dawn." He said glowing similar to a Drive activation as Way To Dawn was glowing black with Riku's hand covered in darkness. "I didn't pick light or dark! The Way To Dawn!" He repeated slashing in front of him.

(XIII Struggle)
Riku quickly flew up slashing Repliku. "The darkness can be controlled. Just in the Right and the wrong way!" He stated as they struck each other's weapons into each other multiple times with a "Cling!" being heard from every hit. Riku grabbed his face and threw him up blasting Dark Firaga in his face. Riku jumped up higher as he slashed him multiple times and grabbed his back digging into his spine as he crashed into the ground. His back was heavily injured as he got up. Riku's Way To Dawn reacted and slightly began to look like Lexaeus' Tomahawk as Riku roared with a aura. "Good thing DiZ taught me to copy a bit." He thanked. 7100 was his current power level as he spun in a tornado rapidly hitting him again. He used Lethal Flame and stopped time "It was my different promise." He said stand with time frozen as he repeatedly slashed him and flew off the area. Repliku was still gaining balance as....BOOM! Riku crashed into the ground as hundreds of rocks flew up and then more came and smashed into Repliku as he flew up. Repliku refused to lose as he slashed down using Dark Break. The battle heated up even more as they exchanged keyblades slashing each other again and again. "It wasn't your promise!" , "It isn't! It's the one I made!" Riku comment slashing Repliku in the face as a large cut appeared. "ARGH! I. CAN'T. STAND. YOU. BEING. SO. REAL!!!!" He actually erupted in anger as the ground cracked!

(XIII Reflection)
Repliku copied Riku's Lexaeus ability glowing stronger than him.
Repliku: 24100
Riku: 20200
The power levels showed as Repliku sliced right through Riku carrying blood from him on Soul eater. Riku struggled to turn around for a counter attack as Repliku performed a unlimited killing spree of Dark aura piercing over and over. Repliku's power wouldn't stop growing as it was 47500 now! "RAH!" He yelled as he slashed Riku in the back completely breaking the ground in half in front of him. The Massive force of gravity from Repliku's power on the floor could not take it as it started breaking and static covered the background. "Namine!" Riku cried as he smacked Repliku back and forth with his keyblade. He stole Soul Eater and began Dual Wield attacking as he didn't give for a instant. The minute the mansion was the battle ground was the minute Repliku slammed into the front door flying out. Hayner, Pence, and Olette heard the crash as they ran towards the forest. "Riku!" Namine called out. "Stay back!" Riku commanded but Repliku slashed him into the sky. He did his version of "Trinity Limit" by himself as he kept slashing left to right and blood was being torn from Riku's chest. Riku screamed in pain from every slash. "S-Stop it..." Namine whispered. "STOP IT!" She called out in tears Riku's head echoed with those words. "I will!" Riku said pulling back Soul Eater attacking Repliku with "Final Form's" combo throwing the keyblades like boomerages and using Thungraga at the same time. Repliku attempted to kill him anyway with Dark Lethal Flame but Riku bursted with Reflect as the aftershock threw Repliku into a wall.
The power is too high! It's way over 9000!
Riku: 99999
Repliku: 0
Riku crushed his keyblade into the wall destroying everything that was behind him which was the forest. The trees burned in dark fire as the three ran in. Repliku disappeared. "It's my promise! I swear!" His final words spoke before leaving the area.

(End of the World Theme)
Riku ignored the three teenagers as his blindfold was burned off and he went to Namine and held her close to him. "I'm sorry. Did I hurt you? Did he hurt you?" He asked her as she was crying. "N-No...But...You got so hurt...." Her voice broke gripping onto Riku's cloak. "Please! Don't get hurt anymore!" Namine begged not standing the bare fact that Riku got hurt solely for the fact the Repliku was jealous. She gripped harder to Riku as she cried her heart out on Riku's chest. Hayner and the others just stood watching. "Poor girl, I wish I knew what made her so sad." Olette pitied as she began crying herself. "H-Hey now! Don't cry!" Hayner and Pence said to Olette but she did anyway. "A second promise then, I will try not to be so severly hurt again. I don't want to see you cry anymore, alright?" He swore as she simply nodded as she calmed her crying and hugged him in sadness.

Why do we all feel pain?
Why must Fights between Real and Fake occur?
Why? Why can't peace be among the beings?
Why did I not notice this sooner?
...I am dead? -Roxas XIII

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Getting the hand of this. This is most certainly my favorite chapter :P
Btw, YES E, The last paragraph was based on some of your RPing. lol.

Yes, I ruined the 9000 joke but fixing it :P

Cnc? No harshies, Plus I love how I make my endings XD

 

No one deserves a beating like that DX Except Bush <3

XEMNAS! WHAT DOES THE SCOUTER SAY ABOUT HIS POWER LEVEL?
IT'S OVER 9000!!!!!1!1111!!1

Repliku vs Riku was awesoem X3

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I killed myself of Laughter.

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Chapter 10: The Humanic Suggestion
"I get to meet them."
Half-Filler

(Twilight Town - Roxas - Calm)(Not excatly needed, Short paragraph.)
Riku looked back at Hayner, Pence, and Olette. "....Go." He said disappearing with Namine. As they all stood there. "Lets go..." Pence told Hayner as he started trying to cheer up Olette as they left.

In The World That Never Was....

(Cavern Of Rememberance)
The members of The Organization were speaking in the room where nothings gather. "So we all agree. No pets. Ever." Xigbar seemed to finishing a conversation as they all nodded. "I actually hate Cats." Axel said and looked at Saix. "But knowing Saix, he'd probably kick a puppy." , "What?" They all laughed at Axel's remark. "Why not a fish?" , "Because the only fishtank is that brain of yours Demyx." Xigbar insulted Demyx. "As you kids would say; "You got owned. Noob." Right?" Vexen stated as they pointed and laughed at Demyx. "Shut up! You could be in the friggin' FCC with those guns." Demyx made a comeback. "What's next your gonna say? There's gonna be a 15th member that's the nobody of a whale? Nice one!" Axel burned Demyx. "Well...." Demyx said with a ";_;" face. "Lighten up you little girl." Larxene insulted Demyx. "Why is everyone ranking on me?" , "Because you touch your nonexistant self every night." Axel owned Demyx once again as even Demyx couldn't help but laugh at his statement.

(Keeeeep it <3)
In a unknown room with a bed. Roxas slept on it as his wounds were completely patched up and the bleeding wouldn't come out. "I heard it....Him." Roxas thought in his sleep. "Why do we fight only to get hurt or murdered in battle?" He thought again as he had a vision of Riku fighting Repliku and Ven getting choked by the Apprentice. "Why can't we be real? Side by Side?" He thought remembering his fight with Sora. He slowly opened his eyes and got up. ".......I'm alive." He remarked disappearing.

(Bleach - Comical World)
"Where in the hell did you get the idea that I was gay?" Xigbar asked Larxene exetreme pissed off. "Oi. Don't you look at KH-Vids you freaking moron?" Larxene replied. "When the hell did you get a computer?" Axel asked her. "She has a whole other life we know nothing about." Zexion mocked as a Lightning kunai went near his head. "Thank you for proving my point mor-" Zexion stopped when Roxas appeared. "About time Lover boy! When were you waking up? The end of the Fanfic?" Axel said to Roxas as Roxas had a crooked smile on his face. "I'm the main character you moron! Also Stop calling me lover boy!" Roxas shouted back. "Relax I'm kidding! Now. We're talking about Larxene's account on KH-Vids." , "She has a account there?" They spoke as Roxas appeared in his chair as he sat down. "Appearantly she doesn't look up porn when on the internet." Xion joked. "What?" Larxene asked as lightning sparked from her and Xion jumped back a little. "It was a joke! Honestly sit down!" Vexen shouted at Larxene and he got smacked by one of her Kunais. "That's what I call a Larxene B*tch smack." Xigbar said as they all laughed. "I'm going to get you for that!" Vexen said summoning his sheild. "Vexen sit down, One of your fangirls actually reads this you idiot." , ".....What?" Vexen looked at Larxene's computer to see "Vexen_Is_God" 's post. "You ignorant morons! Why didn't you tell me that?!" Vexen said in shock. "Because we thought you knew it old man." Marluxia commented. "I AM NOT OLD!" Vexen screamed returning to his seat. "Now now, enough 60 year old." Axel added. "NOT OLD!" Vexen replied as mad as ever.

(End of the World - Calm - I just love that song now <3)
The organization were acting as a true family. They loved each other like brothers and sisters as they aruged. "Get off my laptop!" Larxene commanded. They laughed and giggled. "I like kittens! Axel don't be mean to them!" Xion said. "Why? They smell." Axel remarked as everyone laughed. They shared plots and ideas. "We need a bar." , "Badly." Xigbar and Axel complained. "Allow Poker in there and you have a deal." Luxord joked on the two. Xemnas appeared in his seat as everyone quickly teleported to sit down. "Any reports?" Xemnas asked as they all shoke their heads. "Uh, Xemnas!" Roxas called out reaching his hand up like a student. "Ah, You're awake. How do you feel?" He spoke back to him. "I'm fine, I have a suggestion." Roxas said as everyone looked at Roxas to listen. "Xemnas, I had a dream....Five people fought in the Sunset Horizons and they might come after us. Not to mention the keyblade masters are still after us. Also we have an enraged Riku. I won't name people....Lexaeus. Back on topic; I think we should disguise ourselves as normal humans. We can hide and learn the human way of life through it all." Roxas explained his ideas as they all clapped in acceptance. "That's a excellent idea!" Xion commented. Xemnas nodded and smiled. "Very Excellent indeed. But you still look like you have something to say." , "I do. We can take on human jobs as well. Me and Xion are too young so we'll attend high school. As for you Superior, You could join us." Roxas finished. "I'm afraid I have business to take care of but this is a very excellent idea. I like it. Roxas, you're in charge of this." Xemnas completely accepted the suggestion disappearing.

(Keep it.)
"Do we get new clothes?" , "Ah, Lover boy, Your brain is workin' fine!" , "I wanna be Jackie Chan!" , "I wouldn't mind trying the sport Wrestling." They all conversated on Roxas' Idea.

(Keep it XD)
I finally get to meet them now.
Hayner, Pence, Olette.
You don't know how long I wanted to know you three for real.
Great friends and a great big XIV family.
What could go wrong?

.......Everything.......

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I lol'd at this so much.

Cnc? No harshies, also if I get Five or more different people to comment, You guys get your first Filler chapter :P

 

I've been reading, but never said anything until now. Very well done. Some comedy here and there, but overall it has a good plot to it.

 

I lol while reading that last chapter. Must now know your reasons for breaking the fourth wall with the part about the computers. Can't wait to see the organization in the human world. This is just a question not a suggestion, but are you going to place any Disney worlds into your story, it's ok without them if you don't want to.

Now if you excuse me I'm going to go get more people to comment on your story.