Pokemon: Ashes to Ashes

Discussion in 'Archives' started by Hiro ✩, Jan 22, 2013.

  1. Hiro ✩ Guardian

    Dec 28, 2010
    Okay, so this is a fanfiction suggested to me by my good bro DarkTraitor (mostly his idea, I just wrote it). It took a lot for me to get it to sound how I wanted it to (I'm not the best writer you see). Anyway, without further ado, enjoy.


    "Come on Crystal! Hurry up or we'll be late!" Gold said while he ran towards the famous Elm Pokémon Lab. Today was the day he had been waiting for. He was finally getting his first Pokémon and setting off on an adventure.

    "I'm coming, I'm coming! Hold your horses!" Crystal said in an annoyed tone.

    When they arrived at the lab, Gold seemed like he was hopping with excitement like a little kid. "This is it Crystal! Today's the day!"

    "Calm down. I'm excited too, but we don't need to make ourselves look immature. Getting a Pokémon is supposed to prove that we're old and responsible enough to look out for ourselves and make good decisions." Standing quietly at the door, Crystal waited for it to open. She glanced at Gold, who seemed to have disregarded what she said. The young girl turned to scold him some more, but in the blink of an eye, the lab door opened and there stood a man with brown hair and glasses. It was none other than Professor Elm himself.

    "Ah, Crystal, Gold. Here to get your Pokémon, I assume? Come on in." He gestured them to follow him before re-entering the building himself.

    Gold looked at Crystal. "Come on!" he said as he rushed in. He immediately went over to the machine that Professor Elm was standing in front of. He was followed by Crystal.

    Professor Elm cleared his throat. "Now then, today is an important day. You start your journey to become great Pokémon Trainers. Perhaps someday one of you will become the Champion. But for now," the Professor pressed a button on the machine,

    "You get to choose your partner." Picking up the Pokeballs, Elm released the three Pokémon from their Pokeballs.

    "Cooool!" Gold said in awe.

    "They're all so cute!" Crystal commented.

    "Which will it be? Chikorita, the Grass-type," Professor Elm indicated to a small light-green quadruped Pokémon resembling a sarupod. "Cyndaquil, the Fire-type," he indicated to a Pokémon that looked like a porcupine or an echidna, "or Totodile, the Water-type?" the last Pokémon he indicated to resembled a baby crocodile. It looked fierce, but wasn't suited to Crystal's tastes.

    Gold hastily made a choice. "I'll take this one!" he said, kneeling next to Cyndaquil. "Hiya Cyndaquil, I'm Gold!"

    Cyndaquil stared at him for a moment, and then leapt into Gold's arms.

    "Alright!" Gold said.

    Professor Elm looked at the other young trainer. "Crystal, it's your turn now," he said.

    "Hmmm..." Crystal contemplated for a while. Totodile seemed powerful, it was also pretty funny, but Chikorita seemed more suited to a girl. "Chikorita, how'd you like to be my partner?" she asked.

    "Chikkuuu!" said the Pokémon, jumping into her arms.

    "Yay!" She cheered.

    Totodile seemed upset as Professor Elm recalled it into its Pokeball.

    "Alright then, would you two do me a favor?" Elm then asked.

    "Hm?" Gold said in surprise.

    "Of course Professor, what is it?" Crystal asked.

    The Professor cleared his throat. "I have an acquaintance called Mr. Pokémon. He keeps finding weird things and raving about his discoveries. Anyway, I just got an e-mail from him saying that this time it's real. It is intriguing, but we're busy with our Pokémon research. Could you two look into it for us?"

    "Sure." Gold said.

    "Of course." Crystal said.

    "Great! He lives just past Cherrygrove city. If your Pokémon get hurt," he indicated to a machine next to him, "use this machine to heal them."

    "Thanks Professor. Gold and I will be back soon. Could we have your phone number just in case?"

    Elm nodded and gave the two Trainers his phone number.

    "Thanks Professor. Now come on Gold."

    Gold followed his friend out of the lab. "Bye Professor!"

    "Stay safe you two! Bye!"

    Once outside the lab, Crystal and Gold excitedly chatted away. Gold went ahead to the Pokemart to buy some Potions, and Crystal waited by the lab. She looked around the corner and saw a red-haired boy around her age looking through the window.

    "So, this is the famous Elm Pokémon Lab." He said ominously.

    "Excuse me," Crystal said, "What are you doing?"

    The boy looked at her with anger on his face. He turned and shoved her. "None of your business! Go away!" He then gave her a small kick in the rump to get her to move.

    Crystal yelped before falling forward. "Ugh, talk about rude." Deciding not to bother with someone as uneducated as him, she dusted herself off and went back to the spot where she was waiting before.

    Gold came out of the shop and handed her a few Potions, which Crystal promptly stored in her bag. "Ready?" he asked.

    "Yeah." she said. "Maybe we should let our Pokémon walk beside us. I'm sure that they'd like that. I heard about a Pikachu that used to walk by his Trainer about 3 years ago." Crystal released her Chikorita, whom she named Megaree, out of his Pokeball. "Hey Megaree, wanna walk around outside your Pokeball?"

    "Chiku! Chikuu!" Megaree said happily.

    Gold looked at Cyndaquil. "How about you Cyndaquil?"

    Cyndaquil gave a shy "Quil" to show his approval.

    "Alright! Let's get going!" Gold said, excitedly running towards Mr. Pokemon's house.

    "Gold! Wait!" Crystal said, running after him.

    After Crystal and Gold had talked to Mr. Pokémon, a man named Professor Oak gave them Pokedexes. Apparently, he wanted them to collect data on the Pokémon that inhabited Johto. Crystal and Gold had accepted the task, and left Mr. Pokemon’s house.
    Outside,Crystal got a call from Professor Elm.

    “What is it Professor?”

    “Crystal, Gold…” The Professor stuttered. “Um… Please get back here now!” Then he hung up.

    “What’s going on?” Gold asked Crys, getting up after petting Cyndaquil.

    “I don’t know…” she replied. “Come on, let’s go!” Crys said, taking off in a run with Megaree trying to keep up.

    On the outskirts of Cherrygrove, Crys saw the red-haired boy from before coming their way.

    “So you two got Pokemon as well, huh? What a waste, giving them to weaklings like you.” He said, looking at Cyndaquil and Megaree, who was glaring at him.

    Crys frowned. “Yeah? Well-”

    Gold interrupted her. “Leave this to me Crys.” He said with a confident smile. “You ready Cyndaquil?”


    “Hm, I guess I have to show you how a real trainer battles!” said the boy. He pulled a Pokeball from his belt. “Go Totodile! Use Scratch!”

    The blue crocodile burst out of the Pokeball, slashing Cyndaquil with sharp claws.

    “Quiiil!” cried Cyndaquil, landing on its feet.

    Gold frowned. “Cyndaquil! Use Tackle!”

    Cyndaquil slammed itself into Totodile, knocking the Pokémon down quite hard.

    The other boy didn’t seem to care. “Get up and use Scratch again!” he ordered fiercely.

    Crystallooked at him. “Don’t you care that Totodile’s hurt!?”

    The red-haired male looked at her. “Pfft, are you serious? If anything, letting it be on the verge of fainting toughens it up.”

    Totodile slammed into Cyndaquil, who was almost down.

    “Cyndaquil, use one more Tackle!”

    Cyndaquil slammed into Totodile once more, knocking it out.

    The red-haired boy recalled Totodile. “Pathetic.” He glared at Gold. “Don’t think this is over, chumps.” The boy shoved Gold and quickly walked away.

    Gold looked at the ground, and saw the boy’s Trainer Card. He read the name, which was very odd.

    “Hey!” said the red-haired kid, before he snatched the card back from Gold. “What do you think you’re doing? You best not tell anyone, chump!” And with that, the boy fled.

    Crys frowned. “Well that was rude. He’s seriously starting to get annoying.”

    Gold smiled. “Come on Crys, we need to get back to Professor Elm and let him know we found the thief!” He picked up Cyndaquil and sprinted off towards Elm’s lab, while Crystal struggled to catch up.

    * * *​

    Back at the lab, a Policewoman named Jenny was questioning the Professor. It was then that Gold burst in. “Aha!” Jenny said, “The perpetrator ALWAYS comes back! You’re under-“

    “Stop!” shouted an unknown voice. Everyone turned to the doorway and saw a girl with brown pigtails and a blue mouse Pokemon following her. “Marill and I saw the whole thing. It wasn’t either of these two! It was a kid with red hair. I don’t know his name, but he had a bad vibe about him.”

    Gold nodded, grateful that the girl had stepped in. “His name’s Silver! I saw it on his Trainer Card. He stole Totodile, not me!”

    Officer Jenny quickly took notes. “Red hair… named Silver. Got it!” the young woman turned to the kids and Elm. “Thank you all for the help. If you need anything, don’t hesitate to ask.” She saluted them, and ran off.

    “Now then,” Professor Elm started. “Lyra, where did you see this boy?”

    The new girl, evidently called Lyra, stood up from the chair she was in. “By Cherrygrove. I was coming back from my Grandma and Grandpa’s house, when I saw this guy and Silver battling.”

    “I see. Gold, Crys, how did everything with Mr. Pokemon go?”

    “Oh, it was great! We got an egg, then Gold battled the kid and Cyndaquil seemed to enjoy himself.”

    “Yeah. Cyndaquil and I are a great team. Crys and Megaree aren’t too shabby though.” Gold turned to Lyra. “I’m Gold by the way! Thanks for the help with Officer Jenny.”

    “No sweat.” Lyra said.

    “Oh, Professor…”Crystal said, “Professor Oak gave us the Pokedexes to research Pokemon in Johto.”

    “WHAAAA?” Elm said, his mouth wide open. “Did he really?”


    “Well… that’s certainly a huge responsibility suddenly thrust upon you…”

    “Ooh, Cool…” Lyra said, marveling at the Pokedex. “If I were you, Gold, I’d challenge the 8 Gym Leaders. Closest one is Falkner in Violet City.”

    Elm nodded. “Lyra is right. Anyone who beats the Gyms can eventually go to the Pokemon League and become Champion.”

    “Champion eh?”

    “Oh great…” Crystal pet Megaree, “Looks like we’ll have to go along to babysit him.”

    “Chikuuu!” Megaree said in agreement.

    “Make sure you say goodbye to your families before leaving you two.”

    “Right. Thank you Professor. For everything.”Crystal said.

    Lyra smiled at Gold. “Good luck! If you need anything, come see me at my Grandparents’ house. They run the Daycare. If I’m not there, then Marill and I are here helping the Professor.”

    “Mar!” said her Marill.

    Gold gave her a thumbs-up. “You bet!” Gold turned to Crys. “You ready?”

    “Yeah.” she replied, heading for the door with her friend.

    “Good luck you two!” Elm said, waving. “Remember to come visit me if you need anything!”
    “Gold, what are you doing?” Crys asked, annoyed that Gold kept stopping them to look in the tall grass.

    “I’m looking for a Pokemon, duh.”

    ”We saw tons back on Route 29, why didn’t you get one then?”

    “I don’t know, those were more suited to your tastes.” Gold said in a cheery voice, continuing his search.

    “So what are we gonna do? You’re so loud you can’t possibly-” Crys stopped when she felt something touching her leg. She looked down to see a Caterpie.

    ”Brr?” it said innocently.

    Crystalgave a yelp and jumped back. She didn’t mind bugs, but when they snuck up on her she did.

    ”Oh cool! A Caterpie! Cyndaquil, you know what to do!” Gold declared, pointing.

    “Qui!” Cyndaquil said the flames on its back flaring.

    ”Cyndaquil, use Tackle!”

    Cyndaquil charged into the little bug at full force, knocking it over.

    ”Pokeball, go!” Gold said, throwing a Pokeball.

    Upon contact with the Caterpie, the Pokeball opened and engulfed it in a white light. The Pokeball flashed yellow, and then slumped to the ground. It rocked. Once, twice, thrice. Then, it burst open; releasing Gold’s nearly caught Caterpie, who then scurried away into the bushes.

    “Aw man! What is this? I almost had it!” Gold said.

    Crystalpatted his shoulder. “Could be worse, you could have failed at catching an egg.”

    “Don’t you mean hatching?”

    ”With your impatience, that’s impossible.”

    “Gee, thanks Crys…” Gold walked away in a sulking attitude, with Cyndaquil at his side trying to cheer him up.

    They walked silently along the route, with Crys taking charge and defeating the Trainers who laid in wait. A few minutes later, Gold and Crys stopped to eat. Gold remained upset that the Pokemon he had almost caught had escaped so easily. It made him feel like he was just a kid, trying too hard to be cool. He sighed and petted Cyndaquil.

    “Gold, look! In the tree!”

    Gold looked at where Crys was pointing to see a Spinarak eating leaves. “Whoa, it’s a Spinarak! Cyndaquil, let’s-” He stopped. “…You go ahead Crys, it’ll probably get away from me…”

    “Ugh! Gold just try and catch it! You won’t fail if you try again, I promise.”

    ”Fine…” Gold said. He threw a rock at the branch, knocking the Spinarak down. “Cyndaquil! Tackle it!”

    Cyndaquil tackled the spider with all his might. As soon as the Spinarak landed, however, it charged at Cyndaquil, with it’s pincers ready to give Cyndaquil a deadly bite of poison.

    “Cyndaquil! Dodge and tackle it again!”

    Cyndaquil rolled around the Spinarak and charged into it from behind, knocking it into submission.

    “Pokeball, go!” Gold said, throwing the ball again. It rocked three times and then clicked, turning a bit darker and sending three stars out. The Spinarak had been caught! “Yeah!” Gold cheered. “We did it Cyndaquil! We caught Spinarak!”

    ”Quil!” Cyndaquil cheered.

    “I told you. Didn’t I tell him Megaree?” Crys asked her Chikorita.

    “Chiko!” he replied.

    “Wonderful effort, kid,” said a voice.

    Gold and Crys turned to see a woman with bright red hair looking at them, obviously having been engrossed by the battle.

    “Thanks. But who are you?” Gold said.

    “My name is Jessie.” She said. “You remind me of a kid I used to know a few years ago. He was a great trainer with lots of love and care for his friends and Pokemon, especially his Pikachu. No one could separate them at all, no matter how hard they tried.”

    “What’s his name? Do you really think I can be as great as he is?”

    Is. That word stung Jessie a bit. Her expression hardened, but she softened it immediately. “Yes. If you want to know more, my house is on Route 31, close toVioletCity. Follow me.”

    Gold looked at Crys and signaled for her to come. “Don’t be such a buzzkill Crys, she seems nice.”
    Crys rolled her eyes and reluctantly followed them to Jessie’s house. It was gonna be a long journey…
  2. Odamadillo Twilight Town Denizen

    Jun 6, 2008
    Here, there and everywhere.
    That is a interesting story I can not wait for the next Chapter. The personality you gave Gold will make this very interesting as the story progresses when connected to Crystal's calm and rational thinking. Keep up the good work HoT.
  3. sonicfan23 Traverse Town Homebody

    Oct 1, 2011
    Somewhere...in the world
    OOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHH, a G/S/C/HG/SS based Pokemon Story? AWESOME! Can't wait for more!
  4. CaptainMIG Gummi Ship Junkie

    Aug 4, 2011
    the wii u
    great story hope you (or your brother) make more of this.
  5. Loxare Hollow Bastion Committee

    Feb 6, 2009
    Flower Field
    Great job HoT! I love the way the characters interact with each other so far. Although... Silver (assuming you go with the official name) kicking Crystal in the rump isn't just rude. It's grounds for an ***whup. Or a battle at least. Oh well. Silver doesn't have his Pokemon yet. Keep going! I can't wait to read more!!
  6. The story is written well, but it just seems to me like your meshing Pokemon Gold and Silver versions together rather than creating a totally original storyline plot so far. However, I do like the personalty added to them. However, the pace was a bit sluggish, even for a start. A decently moving opener grabs a viewer(Or in this case the reader)'s attention. I may have bad English skills, but I do know how to write a an effective story plot wise. Overall, so far a 3/5 for the start, but normally I credit people with a 2 or 1 for there opening post in the story. Good work and wish to see more.
  7. Hiro ✩ Guardian

    Dec 28, 2010
    Updated with the (seemingly long-awaited) Chapter 2! Hope you guys enjoy!
  8. CaptainMIG Gummi Ship Junkie

    Aug 4, 2011
    the wii u
    chapter 2 is good but y did Totodile have tackle when he suppose to have scratch?
  9. Hiro ✩ Guardian

    Dec 28, 2010
    That was a typo, thank you c:
  10. Hiro ✩ Guardian

    Dec 28, 2010

    So you guys know (if you're still following this), I plan on updating sometime next week. Stay tuned kids~
  11. Odamadillo Twilight Town Denizen

    Jun 6, 2008
    Here, there and everywhere.
    I look forward to reading it HoT.
  12. Hiro ✩ Guardian

    Dec 28, 2010

    Finally got the time to write Chapter 3. Hop you guys enjoy~
  13. Meilin Lee RPG (Red Panda Girl)

    Nov 2, 2011
    Awesome stuff HoT! As someone who's been obsessing with Pokemon recently (for reasons I cannot explain), this was very enjoyable. Can't wait to read the rest!