Time

Discussion in 'Archives' started by cstar, Dec 26, 2012.

  1. cstar stay away from my waifu

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    I wrote this poem
    in fifteen
    seconds.
    It seems
    wasteful
    but for that fifteen
    seconds
    I went through my
    mind,
    looked at my
    memories,
    and it felt like
    eternity.
    All I needed
    was that fifteen
    seconds
    to feel at
    peace.

    Note: CnC is appreciated, but I really did write this is 15 seconds during a day at school. I modified a couple words from the original because the "at peace" part was originally "cry inside". It was during a day I felt sad, but every-time I look at this poem I feel like it should say "as peace"​
     
  2. NightCrisis Twilight Town Denizen

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    Cool poem. It sounds like it should be in a video game opening.
     
  3. Technic☆Kitty Hmm

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    Interesting, never seen anyone go for the time length . . . It's actually an intriguing idea. Aside from that, it was short and sweet. You got your point across, and even added a deeper part at the end. Good poem ^.^