You. You were there. You were the one when no one else was, But then you left. You. You were the only one. You were my hearts keeper. But you went. You. You were with me. You went through it all with me. But not anymore. You. You shared. You listened. But now you cant. You. You knew, You loved. But it's all gone. You. You cared, You hoped, But all for naught. You. You seemed fine, You seemed well, But you were suddenly lead along by death's cold hands.
Wow i love that poem mostly how you used so little words but i still felt a lot of emotion in it. Good keep it up.
i write improv, so alot of my stuff can seem "Wtf" at first. EDIT: true story though, so its not an improv idea, its improv on how i felt on expressing it EDIT 2: i feel like writing another one i just thought of.
Exactly. i write best when i can just think. this poem had no structure will i had finished the first 2 stanzas and then i just went with it because i felt good about it. EDIT: posted new poem, Simple.
Well, I can't think of any poetry that requires no thought XD, still, it gives your poem more merit knowing that you just "spit" it out without development.
I essentially tendf to write bland "i had to do this for school" poems when is it there thinking of something. i wrote this poem line by line, each line separate from the other, each line having its own specific meaning.
Nice poem... I like it^^ and it's alright if you use alot of "you"s... it's called repetition and it helps bring out your poem and help it stand out XP oh and I like how you put "but" at the beggining of the last line in every stanza... nice touch! Keep up the good work and I hope to see more from you :3
Thanks. i actually never noticed the way the stanzas were formed until i had written the first 2 stanzas.
